Oh my gosh...these are so, so good! *wipes tear from eye* I'm truly impressed-you're doing an excellent job at capturing the characters' emotions at key points in the game. Keep updating this, and don't give up on your other stories; I'd love to read more of your work!

Nicely done! Especially "How can you say" and "Regret" express very well certain character traits of Kain and Cecil. Hmm - it would be interesting to see what Rosa thinks about Kain's and Cecil's words...

As always, your poems are beautiful

It was VERY good. I loved it!

::wipes tear from her eye:: As a rabid Kain lover, I really must say, that was gorgeous. It caught Kain quite well. Keep up the good work.

Oh, bravo!

FFIV poetry is a rare thing to find, and this is a sweet little gem if I may say so myself. In my mind, it captures what I feel is a very realistic representation of stream-of-thought for Kain. Your style is very clean-cut and easy to follow... you jumped head-first into what was important and stuck with it. I can feel Kain's churning confusion, self-doubt and overwhelming guilt... and at the same time, his sincere regret and sorrow.

And in a critiquing point... I was looking at a review that was already here that mentioned the use (or over-use) of questions in a piece. Though I agree that over use of questions in a work can be crippling, I don't know that I felt that the questions really took anything away from this particular poem. It was a consistent theme used throughout... even the title was a question. For me, it brought introspection, and helped me to get into Kain's head by hearing him voice the doubts that surrounded him. Still, each to their own, yes?

Keep it up! I'd love to see more!

Yay! Someone else who loves ellipses as much as I do. They're gorgeous little punctuation marks; I believe they're the best way to capture the way people actually think. I also like the rhythm.

My favorite lines are "Lies don't help /...Much..." Because that's sad, but he does seem to think that way... all bottled up inside. -_- And he's so uncertain inside, even though he acts so proud- you just know it's an act. (Aww...)

Suggestion: Okay, this poem has lots of questions. That's one way to write, but if it's done too often, I sometimes see it as a bit of a cop-out. (And yes, I am often guilty of doing it- it's something I'm trying to work on.) If you ask a question, you don't have to answer it, and that's just too easy. You're making the reader do all the work of answering the question.

Of course Kain doesn't know the answer himself, so you can't just answer it. So- in classic Jeopardy style, I'd try giving a statement instead of a question. You could replace "How can you possibly forgive?" with something like "Unforgivable in my eyes." Of course, occasional questions are good too, and I think this is a good poem already as it stands... so keep writing. And I want to see you finish those half-done stories!

FF4 forevermore!

Iteresting poem Lot of ramble Need to cut the ramble in half oh and by the way the cows on fire

But on a more serious note how in the world did you manage to live with a few half-dozen stories sitting around I know I'm deffinitly going insane because of mine

This is a good poem, and keep on writing good ones...

You're very good at showing Kain's true feelings, though I don't think he ever lost his will to fight.