What happened to chapter 2-10??

UPDATE!

That was cute! Please update!

A new update!! wonderful! four new chapters! wow anyway i liked them and cant wait for more!

i liked it. but after seeing when the story was published, i take it that you are not going to be updateing in a while... too bad. anyway i hope this can change your mind and update fast! lol

UPDATE!

great story. please continue!

This story is very good so far! I think it is really well written so far. Update soon!

:)

I like it a lot.
you're a great storyteller, good at keeping me completely immersed and interested in finding out where this is all going to end. It's well written (word choice, sentence structure, etc.) and readable, and the dialogue flows naturally. Oh, and it's pretty well balanced out non-dialogue passages, which is nice.

ok ok, "it is extremely helpful...blah blah blah ...aspect of the story...improved...blah blah blah...well rounded critique... blah blah blah..." Yeah. I'm trying, here.

If you want to work on anything, I'd say the characters can be a bit inconsistent. A few times I found myself thinking something like "wait, wasn't he thinking just the opposite a minute ago?" Although you did do a good job of making them believably consistent with what we already know about them in the canon, and I certainly can't say it stopped me from enjoying the story any.

but yeah, if I were editing it, I'd clear up a few minor inconsistencies, or places where just a bit more explanation could make a huge difference between your readers really getting it and them just gliding over a passage on the way to the next part...and I'd reread it and run a spelling/grammar check of course, but I think you actually did pretty good on that. (what am I thinking? I mean "pretty well", of course :) )

All in all, I really liked it. You really have a gift for storytelling and skill with words. And the imagination to make use of them, which is a great thing.
Keep writing!

(update soon. please? :) I'm dying to read more.)

I like the view on Draco's near killing of Dumbledore but stick to my conviction that Snape was under the Imperious curse. Please update, for one day we shall die.

I love this story! Even though it's the first chapter, it's really good. And I'm likin the fact that Sirius is still alive, cuz I'm still in a severe denial of his death in the fifth book. Can't wait for the next chapter!