You answered a big question there. Not with Yori, that much I would have expected, but Karen Pellman. I did not expect her have been an actual person. Very well written.

I wonder if Karen's parents were killed by DeLong as well.It would have been a good way for him to get close to her.Love how the Sensei/Yori sitch worked out.I wonder if Hirotaka ,the disgrased ninja from Ron's time at the school, is the informant for Panther.

I believe there are couple of tense issues in the last part, owing, no doubt, to the complex construction you chose (which I liked); but . . . no big. (Although DeLong was awfully lucky to have a Kim Possible lookalike for a niece!)

Excellent, as was the story it follows.

There truly was a Karen Pellman. I find that to be one of the saddest parts of the 'epilogue' That she, an innocent girl, was handed such a grisly fate.

There were some happy moments though. Yori being appointed successor. The idea of 'courtly love' is one that I am a big fan of as well, and I always like seeing it executed. Even if in this case it may just be an afterthought. (I sincerely hope it is not though.)

Delong was a monster. If I had the power to decide his fate, it would either be a life sentence or death!how dare he kill his own niece as well as do all the other terrible things he did. Good job tying up all the loose ends.

cool epilogue but what the hell is that suposed to mean? it waits no more? and thats a nice way to add another story to the fallen lol

Dude, How did I miss this!? Nice tie up, I loved the Sensei/Yori play.

Poor Karen. At least her spirit is free now.

Good read, amigo!
THANKS!

Here I am, finally with enough time to get caught up on my reviewing of stories from my favorite authors. Okay, what we have here is definately a very interesting epilogue to "The Fallen".

You have taken us away from Kim and Ron for a while and given something that answers a few questions that I had at the end. I found it nice to know that you gave Yori some closure, I was wondering what became of her. Sensei has chosen his successor, nicely done. I can imagine Yori being the one that he would choose.

What I found most interesting is toward the ending. At first, I began to wonder if it was Kim herself, but it was actually Karen. So DeLong killed her because of the resemblance to Kim, which I think is highly believeable for this man who would stop at nothing for power.

As for the actual ending, it almost seems like a prologue to something much bigger. I noticed that you made it a oneshot, and while it is really good where it ends, there was a lot of potential that you built up. Like your summary suggests, you tied up some loose ends and set up a few more. Nevertheless, excellent wrap up to an incredible story.

WesUAH, wow!~ What a great story! I read the other one but I had no time to review it, sorry! But I was following it, and I must say, it has become one of my all-time favorites! Curse Richard DeLong! He deserved what he got, though I wish his death were a bit more horrible...he violated KP in every way, destroyed her virginity, and now he's killed his own niece! What a lousy, stinkin' weasel! DeLong's the biggest, most evil...i don't know! Words fail me! Whatever he is, he's a BIG one of those! Anyway, congrats on your excellent start! Good luck to your new pieces, and lookin' forward to readin' em!

Brilliant.

oh cliffy

are there going to be any explanations on the new questions or not?

as always keep up the good work

-Anghammarad-

I must say, this was a very nice wrap-up to your previous story (which I heartily enjoyed). I know the summary says it's a one-shot, but are you going to consider adding to this at all? Just a thought.

That was a great chilling effect at the end. Shudders, man! Great job.

Wholly shit. He killed his, was it neice I can't recall. That explains a few questions but opens more, and leaves room for a sequel.

That's beautiful, from first word to last.

Ah yes questions have been answered and yet more remain. True artwork with the last part. I look forward to what is next.