okay, that was beautiful. Very insightful and metaphorical...love the part about the taint... Cloud is such a complicated soul to write, and I think u did great on the It Ends With Me, and how this one too. Love ur stories, keep them coming ne? ^^

gotta love it! great work
-peace

O.o you've done a good job. It was very nice written. I like Marlene's pov...

*sniff* Aw... So sad. It ook me a while to figure out that was Vincent. -.-;; Silly me. This well written.

Yo MajinBakaHentai you faggot I'll smack off your Kuffi for thinking that rainbow shit you damn homo.

wow i REALLY LOVE this story i the paring is really nice to, marlene/cloud it's diffrent and i like it your should REALY make a chapter2 or some story where cloud does come back. I'd like to see marlenes exprission :)keep up on the wounderfullf writing

Now THIS is a concept. And I love it. I love the description and the lack of names (though you give great hints) and all that.

And I love the whole idea of the taint and all that. ^_^

~Cendri

I really enjoyed seeing Marlene's point of view. Her thought about how Cloud tainted the others was the line that hit me the most.

Whoo! Great work! I really did like seeing Vincent there, and do I detect some small implications of Cloud/Vin? ^_^
Love that you tied it to "It Ends With Me", I guessed you might do that when you said it was a deathfic.

Thankye Quela!

Ew you sicko! Marlene with the hots for Cloud? You're crazy. But I guess she was older at the moment, also what 7-8 year old does not know if he/she loves someone right? WHATEVER--It was a good story and Vincent at the end was awesome. I don't like that "Because I'm not dirty like him." part...WTF?

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