|Reviews for Shenmue: An Alternative Story|
| joebthegreat 8/12/06 . chapter 12
that wuz M rated!
just a warning... you might get this deleted for stuff like that...
it was funny though...
and it was an update... YAY!
| reader 8/3/06 . chapter 11
make a new one
| joebthegreat 6/7/06 . chapter 11
too bad it's in a section that no one reads about...
but this is still awsome! And that's all that matters!
| AlKaholiK 5/19/06 . chapter 11
Hey man, puctuation and spelling issues aside, this story is VERY funny so far. You gotta' keep going with this!
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 9
What a tramatic experience for Ryo! Ew! Anyways, now i really wanna play Shenmue again! I read somewhere that Shenmue 3 was canceled for good... unless that changed or it was bad info...
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 8
Yep! Ren sounds very familiar! Very shadey and greedy character! Funny parody!
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 6
Funny theories about Tom...
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 5
Icky daydream, Nozomi! Other than that, this is hilarious!
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 4
Funny! So those saturn scores are only worth two capsule toys? That's sad...
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 3
Funny, but I'm not too fond of the nickname you gave Fuku san...
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 2
Shame on Fuku-san! This parody is funny, but could use a bit more detail... I need to play this game again! You should do a parody of Shenmue 2 too!
| Inuyashasgirlfriendforever 1/23/06 . chapter 1
Aw! that's terrible! Poor eagle! That was funny!
| zzz1266 11/26/05 . chapter 7
“ Well then make me something, then make it my usual. And make me a tea, then throw it away and give me a coke. I hate tea!” lol, heheheheh, I think this is a really good parody, next chapter!
| DougS 11/11/05 . chapter 7
I love your sense of humor! So far it's extremely funny crap. The last chapter wasn't as good as the other six, but I can't wait for chapter eight. I love it when Ryo goes around asking for sailors all the freaking time. Ha! This is some awesome stuff, keep it coming!
You could use some help with punctuation, though. You know, end your questions with a question mark, put an apostrophe into words like "don't" and "can't" and "won't" and whatnot, put periods at the end of your sentences. If you did that, a lot more people would probably read this and review it, because a lot of people have trouble reading stories without good punctuation. And you deserve some more readers.
| ghd 10/28/05 . chapter 5
I dig it and I usually hate all fanfics.