nice ...no i mean great!! looking foward to your next fanfic

I enjoyed this story a lot ! It was awesome. *thumbs up*

Absolutely superb - I love the idea of the Aoyama sisters raising Setsuna :)
The ONLY critisms are the slight slips in grammar.
GREAT JOB

Cool story

Hey that was really well done look into Setsuna's past. I'm a fan of the Aoyama sisters so it was nice to see them together with Setsuna as a family. You had a lot of blanks to fill in while writing this and the end product is for lack of a better word Awesome. Read ya Later

Ahh! It ended... But great ending... I love it... Keep it up and write more fics... Looking forward for your next work!!

Although it's an interesting concept to go back in time to view the history on one of my favorite characters, the redundency of the sentences make it feel a bit repetitive. If you tell me who is doing the action, you dont need to mention him/her in the adjacent line.

A 3 out of 5.

Ahh... Great story... Keep it up! Update soon!

It is a great story, really made me think of her past and such. Other reviews were right though, that there were some errors. I hope ur last chapter ends up nicely, showing events that will happen at the start of Negima. That would be perfect. I'll help in your next chapter if you like, just contact me if u like. ^_^

W0oT! So dramatic, so action packed! Please think of the plot holes before you write eg.If karas/sora could not kill Setsuna, how could his stroke at her(Setsuna) kill Shoko?

Thanks for sending me the link ^_^ Good points there regarding Setsuna's wounds and her meditation. Continue it soon!

I look forward to Chapter 10! Keep up this great story!

Nice story, and yes it's clear and simple to understand =) don't worry about it, you're on the right track.It's even alright to not make it too simple. Setsuna's past (as depicted in your story) is really interesting, and I particularly like the scene where she had to fight with her own father. That is one possible explanation on why she really had an issue with her bloodline, even when she's with Konoka. Good work,and hope to see more chapters!

Yet some more good Chapters. Can't wait to read more!

I'd probably rate this fic 7.5/10. It's not the best, but not the worst either. There were quite a few grammatical errors I noticed, as well as some technical errors. Maybe a little bit more research might've done the fic some good.

I was a little concerned with Motoko in this fic, since she seemed a little bit out of character. You realize she's about 11-12 yrs. old when Secchan was 6? Anyhow, the story is cute. Didn't think of having Sakurazaki adopted by the Aoyamas. Some improvements needed, but overall nice job. =)