this is good.

IT'S VERY GOOD!

oh this story is really good. please put up the next chapter. i want to read some more.

So is Cutter going to show up eventually? And maybe Raven and Skywise . . . You know ;).

this is really good. I can't wait for you to update this. What happnes next and how does Cutter get introduced?

I'm intrigued to see where you take this story. I like that you haven't tried to make Raven a perfect little elf child. Characters with a few flaws are much more interesting. One tip... I find it easier to read dialogue when it is separated from the paragraphs of the story. But that's just my personal opinion. Post more when you can!

Yay! Clearbrook! More of her definitely!

I love this Luna! This is a great story, and I like how oyu have Raven act similar to Bearclaw, because Cutter is the perfect mix of the two, while you've made his sister almost a mirror image of her father.

Please Update again soon. THis is an interesting story. I would like to see how you make things progress.

i am huge fan of elfquest and i love your story

shade and sweet water to you as well. please continue with your writing. we will all be waiting

so will raven (when she is older )be skywise's girl firend? please say it is so!

Aww, this is cute! You should continue!

I'm quite surprised that this is your furst fan fiction eve. It's quite good.

I think Bearclaw would be a little more practiced,though. After all, he's known Cresent, and quite a few other cubs.

Your dialogue could use a leetle polishing, but otherwise, keep it up. And have fun! Remember that's writing is for!

you've made Bearclaw SO out of character, it's not funny. he wouldn't be so grumpy and unsure of what a cub would be crying about.

he would be delighted to have a cub. and since everyone raises the cubs in their tribe, he would have had some practice before this, and known what the cub wanted was feeding.

did you even read any of the Elfquest books before this. yeegads!