update!

Excellent. Please finish this.

beautifully written, great to see some more Abby/Jake stories appearing

i like it- it's good :)

From the point of view of content, this is perfect. From the point of technical writing, this is also perfect. I really enjoyed this and look forward to more. There is going to be more, right? Please?

I love the story! Please update soon!

I really liked this. You have a great talent. Witty and very nicely written.

Nothing really bad at all. Please keep it up.

update soon. what about the baby. when will it be born.

heh its cute update def.

That was amazing. You do a great job with imagery. Another thing I noticed is you don't just directly tell the story. You add in other things to make it more interesting to read. For instance the lead in the beginning about the bugs. How you described them was amazing. I look forward to reading more soon. You are an amazing author...

Interesting beginning. I am very interested in how the rest of it is going to play out.

This shows great promise. I can't wait to find out what is happening between them. Is he going to be around for her and the baby? Or is he goingto scarper.

You might want to change the title - someone has already used it for a cordano story.