Reviews for Heartache Cafe

Reviews For: Heartache Cafe

Symbolist 2005-12-21 ch 1,	abusePlease move this to the Wicked category. We're trying to get all the Wickfics in there. And that's where this belongs. :-)
elphaba-thropp 2005-08-29 ch 2,	abuseThis is absolutely fantastic! I wish the chaps were a teeny bit longer though. Keep up the good work!
elphaba-thropp 2005-08-29 ch 1,	abuseExcellent chapter! emerald embodiment of contradiction... LOVE it!
hello 2005-08-29 ch 2, anon.	abuseit's good! I can't wait for the next chapter! it should be very interesting.
blufair 2005-08-27 ch 2,	abuseHeh, I always had wondered exactly how Elphaba could have convinced Galinda to meet with Boq. Manipulating her fear of looking bad... interesting. Galinda's flustered responses to Elphaba felt very in-character. I like how Elphie seems so torn and frustrated about Boq at the end, particularly in the last couple of sentences. Can't wait for more!
blah65 2005-08-25 ch 2,	abuseI did like this chapter - only problem was that it was a bit short. I have that problem too, which makes me a hypocrite, but still! Well, it depends on where you're going with the story. It sounds kind of like you're re-telling the book. Is that what you're doing, or are you taking off with a new plot? This is more rhetorical, just trying to be helpful. I like your writing a lot, update soon!
blah65 (won't let me sign i... 2005-08-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseOh, I positively love this! Keep going, keep going!
blufair 2005-08-21 ch 1,	abuseOh, how cute. I've never seen an Elphie/Boq fic before, but I got the impression that Elphaba liked Boq during their ** days, too. I like how you show Elphaba's outward abrasive attitude and her inner insecurity about herself. The bit with the scarf was good, but I'm not sure if her reaction to the rain was strong enough. If she was actually getting wet, I think she should have been in more pain. Also, try not to switch perspectives between characters in the middle of a paragraph. Other than that, it was good, and I'd really like to see more.
Ember Witch 2005-08-21 ch 1,	abuseBrillant! I loved it you captured Elphaba perfectly Galinda was great as well. I knew that you could pull somehting like this off! Mo! (laughs, sorry I know that was your line but I couldn't resist!)
Reading Redhead 2005-08-21 ch 1,	abuseHm, interesting, I really haven't seen much Boq/Elphaba. However, your beginning to this seems good, and as I always enjoy something different, I'll be back for more if you intend on updating. One thing bugged me -- at one point you used italics for Galinda's thoughts even though she wasn't narrating. I was confused at the POV switch -- if you do more things like that you might want to use a line break. ~Red

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