That... was very good. That was very nice, and well-written.

Especially the last line! ^_^

Keep up the good work!

I actually wrote a story once about sort of like this but it was lik two chapters long. Hakkai was twenty two whilst Sanzo was just thirteen. Hahaha... sadly I killed Sanzo coz I was starting to think he was a bit OOC... Hm... maybe I should post it up one of these days...

From 1-10, your story is an eleven! MAKE A SEQUEL!

Hey, nice story here! Go 383! ^^

Is this a one-shot or a to-be-full-out story? If it's a one-shot you should seriously consider making it a full story, it would be really nice!

Great work again,
:Illusions of Myth: