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Malia Kibuta 2008-09-21 ch 1, anon.	abuseGood story.
Ashes.to.Acid 2007-05-17 ch 4,	abuseO.O; How could I have completely missed this?! Once again, you've created another masterpiece.. and the fact that this is fanfiction makes the criteria go up so much higher, but you excelled that! The plot and feelings of the original Paranoia Agent are captured perfectly in this work. The dilemmas of every character you've made up are very realistic and immediately caught my attention, then slowly lead me through in an endless cycle of twists and turns. Each chapter is brilliantly executed and I commend your usual creative flare in this. The Horoscope prophecies, the media clips, the overall way you compose this is so -different- from what everyone else does.. I love it, I really, really do. -favorites- By the way, it's nice hearing from you again! ^^ ~ Much love, Bleached Roses
Booster 2006-08-28 ch 4, anon.	abuse... Terryll, you are awesome. Seriously, it's good to see you up and writing this wonderful creation again, and with a new flair! I loved your story before, and I think I love it more now! You have a great nack for pacing, I should mention, and the characters are wonderful and realistic! This story carries with it not only its own granduer, but a definite feeling of Paranoia Agent, almost the same feeling I have while watching the series! Hell, the layout makes it a series in itself! In addition, I love Maniwa's Horoscope Prophecies! Very original, and a little more stylish than the etchings (though I loved the Prophetic Equations too, mind you. ^^). They carry just enough obscure meaning to make me wonder, yet keep me guessing. Also, the beginning of each episode, where you describe the varrying forms of communication, is fantastic! I love the little touches you've added, and only wish I could do the same in my own fic (which I'm still working on. No worries. ^^;) I've rambled enough. Keep up the good work, my friend! And as always, no pressure. I'm surprised you guys haven't bugged me about my own work. laughs nervously Anyhow, it's been a pleasure seeing your revised work. You have my deepest regards. -Booster
TURMOIL 2006-08-13 ch 4, anon.	abuseHey Terryll... The ending's different. I mean, slugger's still a girl, that I STILL want to know. (Curse you and your strangely working mind! Why must you torment me?) But now it seems more...more... Gods! That Rachel is a machocist, isn't she? (I might have spelled that wrong...sorry.) She's insane! Her father's a nut! This chapter was good, but the issues here just make me want to rip my hair out! That's a sign of good writing. If you can make me want to rip my hair out over an issue like this TWICE, you're an awesome person. And no, I happened to find your Equations easier than your horoscopes. But maybe that's because I like math more than horoscopes...yeah, all my friends say I'm a nerd. Sigh Terryll-sama, you must continue. The Paranoia Agent section is nearly dead. You're the only one keeping it alive for me!
TURMOIL 2006-08-05 ch 3, anon.	abuseBlink blink You are too good, you know that? This chapter was screamed "Yuichi Taira" all over...and kinda reminded me of my own "Migoto Taira" chapter...But Ashe... He's a piece of work. I mean, the fact that he has a man-lover hanging around doesn't bother me, and I think you managed to capture the pressures and stresses of a person suffering from delusions of grandeur (did I spell that right? Oh well...) and the pressures of having a unconventional sexual lifestyle. I am UNWORTHY! sob I must see the rewrite of chapter four. Don't keep me waiting!
The Famous Son 2006-08-04 ch 1,	abuseI hope lil slugger killed those two hics spewing the word fag like that. Fucking idiots
Booster 2005-11-12 ch 4,	abuseshudders Wonderfully creepy. I'm most definantly hooked now! Another Lil' Slugger? And this one's a girl? This just makes things all the more mysterious! I love it! Not to mention Rachel has a little something in common with Harumi/Maria. The attention to details was, once again, splendid. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. As I've said to TURMOIL, don't be afraid to take your time.
Starlight's Delight. 2005-11-11 ch 4, anon.	abuseFirst of all I would like to say WHERE THE HELL HAVE YOU BEEN!? You haven't been reviewing, and up until now there were no new chapters. I was actually getting worried about you man. But now I know absense only makes the heart grow fonder. This is probably the best chapter yet except for perhaps the first one. You have noticeably cut down on the descriptions, and the result is near perfection. You've cleared away what's unnecessary and left behind pure and well paced story telling. To you I say well done. And hey, check out my new stuff sometime why don't you? Your reviews always make me smile. You, S.S. Bat, now all that I need in my trinity of evil is TURMOIL, hm...
Gijinka Renamon 2005-11-10 ch 4,	abuseHey, I really like how you do the "Prophetic Equations" at the end. I wanna try something like it, but I don't know how. ^_^; Ja ne. ~ Gijinka Renamon ~
TURMOIL 2005-11-09 ch 4,	abuseYou. Rock. This was a total mind-screwing chapter. I was mesmerized by the ending. Girl? That was completely unexpected. This chapter totally kicked ass. I can find no critisism to make, my friend. I eagerly await your next chapter. Girl? I still can't get over that. Best of luck. TURMOIL
xo-lilacsxandxlolita-ox 2005-10-29 ch 2,	abuseYou know, such a long and wonderfully detailed story only deserves an equally long and wonderfully detailed review! I bestow this review upon you in order to thank you for such an enjoyable read and the sheer delight of emotions that were evoked through me when I have read this. Whenever I read throughout the piece, I was practically shivering with anticipation, and everything is just spot on perfect. Everything is just the way that it should be, and it feels like something that a real manga, and it has scenes that have that authentic anime feel to it as well. Your description is as stellar as ever, and of course, you have an undying suspense throughout the story that has enraptured all of your readers, and I see that you have grabbed a couple of fans for this story as well, and you are entrancing them under your marvelous spell of story telling. Such beauty, such eloquence that you express yourself through this story, and the characters are living, vibrant, three-dimensioanl beings that possess every spectrum of the human emotion. This piece of fanfiction is absolutely gorgeous, and it's at the point where I cannot consider it simply fanfiction, but something more on the lines of genius, or a masterpiece. I think that you have truly out did yourself on this chapter, because it had all the same elements from the last chapter that had made the story itself so extraordinary, but it gets even better hear, the suspense keeps on mounting higher and higher like the progressive climb of a rollercoaster going up a hill. The story itself is just fantastic, and once again, I have a series of words and sentences and phrases that I want to say, but with my meager vocabulary, I cannot express the way that I wish to say about this fic. The interaction at the beginning of this scene was stunning, and I was once again dazzled by your wonderful wordplay and your imploy of characterization throughout the piece. This actually sounds like actual conversation sketched out from real life and given new dimension through words, and everything about this is just brilliant, pure, sheer, unadulterated genius, actually. Now, in this chapter, we get even further sight with Jason's character and his history that we weren't able to see from the first chapter or from the last posting of TDiM on Fictionpress, and we learn about his mother, who was never introduced before. Your story still keeps up the wonderful pace, and it goes neither too fast or too slow for anybody, and it's just at the right speed, and it rolls along like an extremely well-animated anime film. We finally get more insight into Tsukina as well, or Suki, from your beloved story of Circus moon, and we get to see her relationship with her mother as well, and I really feel for Tsuki more than I have felt for her before, because now I've gotten further insight on her relationship with her family and understand more about her history as well, and her characterization is becoming more deeper and rich with every passing word that is grazing past my eyes. I feel so sorry for Tsukina, and I'm starting to have a really harsh dislike towards Suki's mother, and my heart is really extended out towards poor Suki-chan. Even though these various characters are from your own work of fiction, with your magical storytelling, you only make those characters an integral part of Satoshi-sama's world, and they are just as real and compelling as other normal, living, breathing human being. I just can't stress enough how wonderful of a writer that you are, Terryll-sama, but everything that you do is just perfection, no, even your work surpasses far beyond perfection itself, and upon a level where mere mortal human beings cannot hope to transcend, and they can only stare in awe and fascination at the masterpiece before them. I am humbled, and I bow down to your godliness. Heather
xo-lilacsxandxlolita-ox 2005-10-29 ch 1,	abuseThis is one of the most fantastic things that I have ever read, and this is one of the reasons why I hold you in such high esteem, which includes the fact that you are a wonderful writer and a great friend as well. Well, there are many ways that I can begin this review, but there are so many words in order to describe the indescribable feelings that I felt for such a magnificent piece of fiction that I'm not sure where to begin. There were many words, many phrases, many things that I can say about this, but my eloquence alone isn't enough to describe how beautiful this fic is. Combining your unique genius in fiction writing along with the master work of Satoshi Kon who has produced Paranoia agent, I think that your plotline is very complementary to the grand vision that Satoshi-sama has proceeded with in his work. By using the unique blend of your characters off of Fictionpress along with the characters in Paranoia Agent, you have created a vision that is both unique and breathtaking. I know that with the creative liberties that you are taking with this fanfiction, I know for sure that you are going to create a literary rollercoaster of a fic that would grab the reader's throat and absolutely refuses to let go until the very last word. Even though your work is known to be very descriptive, this doesn't stop me from lingering across every word lovingly and just absorbing it into my brain, and I have to say that everything you do is clever, especially with the formatting and the websites that you have created at the end. The very beginning of this fic was a good start, and of course, I was compelled to read even more of this fic. The dialogue is compelling as well, and every word lingers in the reader's mind with gravitational force, and the things that you have incorporated into this fic has made my mind staggeringly light and it is reeling all over the place while you have once again extended to another height of magnificence and perfection. At this point and calibur, you will far surpass any other writer that has come into existence. You sure know how to employ the techniques into the suspense drama, and your writing is extremely versatile, because you have been writing from a fantasy genre with the Wheel of Time from our beloved Robert Jordan, and now you're writing a startling new story with a wonderful prospect involving Paranoia Agent. Even though I don't know that much about Paranoia Agent except from the little bit that I've heard from you, I am now persuaded to be looking more into this genre, and especially after reading your th13rteen hours, which was inspired from this, I would definitely hunger for more of this fic, and for seeing some of the Paranoia agent series and see what it's all about. I trust your judgement in this kind of genre, because I know that you are both a manga and anime aficionado, I know that you would only the pick the best out of the best. ^^ We are finally introduced to Jason and his father, which were first introduced in the story of TDiM, which was a fantastic story, which was unfortunately taking down, but I see that the characters from that are given new life in this wonderful fanfiction, and I'm glad to see that they are reincarnated into the world of Paranoia agent, which has proved to me to be a fantastic genre and have a wonderful storyline. As always, the characters are brought to life through the summoning of your words, and you are practically like a demi-god who can unravel an entrancing spell of a story that can enrapture a reader for hours. Everything that the characters do or say, now matter how little they seem, hold significant impact on me, and their interaction with one another is seamless. The repetition of 'Zero or One' has significant impact, and the mystery of it holds a magical suspense and it has engulfed me into this wonderful fanfiction and world that you have interpreted further from Paranoia Agent. Everything about this story can just be described in two words, which are these: pure perfection. Such perfection that there are practically tears in my eyes after reading this, it is simply that good. It's just that a story written with this much passion and talent is a wonderful blend, and you have given me a truly enjoyable read. I shall not stop applauding until weeks, no, months from now. Heather
Gijinka Renamon 2005-10-24 ch 3,	abuseYay! Update! (Looks at a certain section) And...um... ew... Okay... Um... yeah. Well, keep going anyway. (And I have nothing against those kinds of people, I just find the whole thing disturbing. Sorry if I offended anybody.)
Booster 2005-10-23 ch 3,	abuseI've been following your story since the beginning, et haven't revewied until now. First off, sorry about that. With that aside, this is a great work. You and TURMOIL have the best PA fics on the site, hands down. The story intrigues me and makes me want to keep reading. In particular, it was a nice touch creating your own intro and ending credit ideas. The music you thought of fits very well. As for this chapter in particular...Well, not my favorite, but still good. I'm not homophobic or anything, but the first part was a bit...er...more descriptive then I would have liked. That might be just me, though. Things are becoming interesting...Bravo to you for this great story! I will follow your progress with interest.
TURMOIL 2005-10-16 ch 3,	abuseHey. Don't get peeved if you're not getting reviews. It happens. Anyway, another good chapter, but...but...I think that you add a bit too much detail now and then. It's not a flame! I just get a bit cross-eyed when I get a lot of detail where a simple sentence or two would have sufficed. And those big paragraphs are a bit of a downer sometimes. You don't have to take my word for it! God knows I suck myself. It really is a good chapter, and a fantastic story. I personally love it, and I eagerly wait for more. (More I say! More!) By the way, I adore your theme songs. Any chance you'll do some for me? (Puts on puupy dog face, then cringes)Ugh. I hate doing that. Best of luck. TURMOIL

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