You should continue this. It's good.

Good story, though canonness is missing... (try reading Shatterpoint. If you're a Mace Windu fan, you'll like it.) Very good detail.

hey! thanks fo putting my story in ur c2. i just saw that...im trying to write, but i just never seem to get around to it. im sry if it has been a while sinc i osted last. but i will try to update soon. thanks again!

your devoted reader~

GRUBSWIPER~

A short chapter, but good. I particurarly like your ability for great descriptions. You described Coruscant in a way that was both unique and true.

The only mistake I found was that, in the same 'block' of writing as the Coruscant description, you wrote 'the two light saber weidlers' I believe lightsaber should be one word. But other than that, no mistakes.

Err...don't worry, I'll still review to this story and read it. Everyone has their oppinions; how could I expect to keep mine if I don't allow you yours? Just...you don't have to review to any more of my stories, LOL. XD Haha...

Well, I can't wait to see what will happen when (if?) the Jedi meet the Sith. I hope you update soon.

I don't understand how some people just simply write with such detail that 'you' put into this fic. It is a plot of that I have seen attempted many times, but not many get past the first chapter that usually gets right to the point. 'Mace Windu was a fine young boy, and by the age of 4 he was already mastering a lightsaber.' I don't see how idiots can think up that idiotism, so well good job done!

I don't know what else to say was that this was a great book. If you are going to review my books, which you don't have to but still...I'll give you a few of advice.

If you're a Harry Potter fan, I'd recomend the American Idiot Wizardvised Songfic and A Marauders Story.

If you love Star Wars, which I'm guessing you do, reads the If series...seriously...read it.

For lord of the rings, different people have different tastes. But several have reviewed positives on When Hope Leaves, but besides that I don't know what to say...you can also check out my fictionpress account...I'm getting a few good ideas right now.

Cheers!

~Onono

I salute You.*salutes*

for being one of the only people to write a fic about windu, and make it good!

I will salut you again *salutes*

okay story but i never heard of light saber whistling.

Left a review on FP so you know. Anyway, I liked it, but 2 issues: First is a 'too ==> thing' and second: Lightsabers don't whistle. Whirr, hum, I dunno, some synonym for that. But not whistling...

I like this. I've never read a fic about Mace Windu, so it'll be something new. :) And since you've done a lot of research, that will undoubtedly help along the way. I admire you for your dedication to researching. :)

As for the story...I liked the beginning. I found it interesting how you put Darth Plagueis's fall into it, and that event made the first chapter compelling...it makes you want to read more. :) However, I found one mistake in your writing:

In the second paragraph you have "...flipped some sizzling steaks of reek, on the grill, over, as a pack of akk dogs..." Well, it's not really a mistake, but more an odd sentence structure. I think you would do better to get rid of all the commas, so the sentence can flow better. But other than that, your writing was flawless. I hope that you update soon. :)

Wow, very good. Very, very good indeed. Keep going.

YO u stole my saying!

I can't wait for more! I can't find anything bad to say so just keep on typing away!

Very good. I loved the intricate detail. Applause applause.

It was definetely brilliant! I have an entire series that I cannot send to end, and I keep getting new ideas for stories that you will find mostly reading my profile is the best way of knwoing what is going on. Since I update it every day, it is quite helpful for me, and others. I would never have dreams of writing this and it seemed very much like the people who write stories relating to Star Wars that are often very great. Continue!

Onono