SWEET! More EO making out! *dies* Anyway, there's something messed up with your formatting, the lines don't go all the way across the page. You might want to check on that, because it might just be my computer being stupid. Send me the next chapter when it's done!

I like this. This is the first story I've seen for SVU that doesn't ground itself in reality, and it's a good angle. I love the line "Your tie is crooked." If you get a chance, check out the story I just posted. It's called My Soul Cries Your Name

thanks for continuing! i love how annoying Huang is.

Yay, vampires and Elliot and Olivia hooking up (and making out) in the same story! My day has been made! All right, so it's 8:16 at night, but whatever. You get the point. I loved it, but you really need to go through and proofread the story. There are quite a few technical errors that detract from the flow and such. If you want, send me a copy of it and I'll proof it for you. Other than that, great work! *spaces out thinking about Elliot and Olivia making out against a wall* Yes...

really well written story. one of the few where i wasn't confused by the author switching between tenses. is that it, though?