I don't think you accurately captured these characters in any way. That is your creative license, but it makes it a poorly executed fanfic, if you ask me. I really disliked it, but I think the logistics were interesting and you could have had something really strong there, had you written it true to the nature of each character. But to each his own.

hi...

yea i didn't really like this story all too much. she was his second choice. i mean he slept with amber and then when she didn't consumate a child he went to rini. he didn't even try to argue with the fates. what kind of man would do that to the women he apparently "loved?" seriously. if he loved her he wouldn't have chosen her second. it frustrates me that you would write something so heartbreaking. after it doesn't work with the first girl he moves to the second. it's like he didn't care about her at all. he should of atleast became a little depressed and felt sorry. he just used the other girl then when it didn't work out he was 'oh sorry i chose the other but can i have you now' i truely hate men like that and this story...

i'm sorry to say but it's fucked up. the end was not the way i thought it would have been. but i guess that's my fault for reading it. good luck trying though. _buh byes

i know it's rude to say that but it's just the way i feel about stories like this.

WOW...now THAT was beautiful. I LOVE IT!
IT WAS SO SWEET!

Definitely a different idea, I loved it! You're talented, and should continue as an author.

Awe! I loved it! I hope you do more!

are there any more chapters plese tell

I think your story is interesting because it's so different. I'm wondering why Darien didn't trust Helios. I think that he would. Also, I was wondering about Rini and Helios. Would they have such a troubled love? Anyway, your story was very original and had lot of detailed information. Keep writing! _

Great story! It was certainly unique. You have a real flair for this. The character development was incredible. Keep it up! : )

*WOW* that was SO good!

Wow great fic. Keep writing!

Oooooooooooh! Go Rini/Helios!

Well, this story had my interest until this chapter. I think both Neo-Queen Serenity and Endymion are badly mischaracterized. Remember, Queen Serenity is Usagi and Usagi is almost fanatical in believing the best of people, particularly people she considers friends. There is no way she would instantly condemn Helios. Endymion is a little more capable of such a reaction, but I think it's a major misstep that turned the plot into a contrivance.

This is the most touching story I have ever read. I almost cried. Peace.

Great Begining! cant wait to read more!

(by the way one chapter of my autobiography, which i have to write for English, is going to be named "My Life As A Bush" and its going to be about all my friends) :-)

Love it! Another soon please!