I know earlier you said this was your first time writing in 1st person. I wouldn't have known it. There was one part where it said "My emerald green eyes snapped over to Potter" in my opinon normally someone wouldn't describe themselves so detailed. Just wanted to say that, but I could very easily be wrong. So far I love the story. Keep up the good work.

OMG!
THIS WAS THE FIRST FANFICTION THAT I HAVE EVER EVER EVER READ. IT WAS ON MUGGLENET
AND I WAS DEVASTATED WHEN I COULDNT FIND IT
THEN I FOUND IT ON HERE!!
OMG!
I AM SO SUPER STINKING HAPPY
CUZ ON MUGGLENET. YOU TOTALLY LEFT US ON A CLIFF
YAYAYAYAYA
WE FOUND IT AGAIN
I HAVE BEEN SEARCHING FOR THIS SINCE LIKE...
FOREVER
lol
WELL, IM OFF TO READ THE REST OF THIS AMAZING STORY AND AND AND. TRY NOT TO HYPERVENTALATE.
ALTHOUGH IT MAY BE TOO LATE

WHAT?

Wow, you portrayed Lily very well. It was all IC and stayed true to her personality all the way through. Your other writings are great also.. I added them to a new community of mine called Chaos and Courtship (LJ, MWPP)

Keep up the excellent writing

i like you story !!
it's great

Wow, amazing story!
I'm off to read number 2 now!

that was the cutest thing when lily wa slike "Sorry, Merlin." the word flow in this chapter was better... maybe it as the list? but i dunno i fint that if the author isnt just writting for the sake of writting it flows better... but oh 'My hair still gets frizzy, my eyes still bagged and bloodshot when I don’t sleep enough' tell me about it... i like the sence of truth you put into this (the stuf she ges through happens to everyone - nice work) and i really like the endingd for this thy make me laugh

hmm... lily seemes a little bit vindictive in this fic but that was hilarious! i think she needs some more friends i mean just one? thats pretty sad... anyway nice chapter

hmm... i saw this on the favorites list of a friend of mine and decided to read it... i thought it was pretty dull (no offence but there is jst no speed or urgency to your words) but after the cuffing comment - which by the ay made me laugh, i shall read on=]

now, this might sound crazy, but has anyone ever suggested anger manag-
DON'T FINISH THAT SENTENCE !
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAQHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA !!
I LOVE THIS STORY !!
Don't know why anyone would suggest anger management to Lily, I mean, She's awesome and has NO TEMPER !!
I have a worse temper, and I also have been reffered to anger management plenty of times, nothing to be ashamed of :)
(okay, not really...:) )
CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SEQUEL !!

I'm sorry, But I love your reasoning and outlook on the world, Lily is extremely likeable and funny, and if she were real, I think she'd be very much like this Lily in this story !
:)
- Victoria Parker :)

Absolutely hilarious!

I love your writing style. As cliché as it may sound - you have a way with words. (I cannot *believe* I just said that...) This is a rather interesting one-shot - it's nice to have one where it's just the character talking about themselves. You never really get that kind of thing without a story attached to it, so this was a new kind of read, which was nice.
100% Love,
Michelle.

hi! i absolutely loved this story! the anger and the jokes and the part where holly is totally funny half awake! keep up with the awesome work! this story was fantastically fabulous! will be reading nuttier than a fruit case in a while! can't wait =) and your writing is flawless! it's funny n creative n the descriptions of lily being not so perfect is really interesting

Nice story! :D