Your writing is beautiful, and the descriptions of specific pictures and instances are delicious to read. I can see that there has been improvement since you wrote this.

However, the plot is a little difficult to follow. Being told that the story takes some cues from Snow White is a great help, but the relationships between characters do still confuse me. You do spend a lot of time having Idesta describe them, but the accounts feel a little mixed-up, and sometimes contradictory.

This could also benefit from having some more scenes written out, instead of described or mentioned by Idesta. Having things put forward more concretely will help keep a better balance between action and description, as well as make things more clear for the reader.

This has a great start! I love stories that get into the villens head!

YEAH! You're back! A-woot!

Okay, I'm so happy. How're you doing, Mizamour? I haven't heard from you for a freakishly long time.

I still love this story.

Beautifully written. I can't wait to read more.

I am liking. I am liking very much. Your writing is spectacular, a lot of emphasis on feeling rather than doing. It makes it a little vague, but that seems to be part of the enchantment. Right now I'm a little lost on who fulfills which parts in the story, but I have faith I will eventually figure it out. Keep this up!

Wow, this is really nice. Hope to see more!

Yo, Mizamour! It's me, byrnwyrm, from deviantART. I followed the link in your journal, obviously. So, I read this lovely piece of writing. Fantastic work. I really would like you to continue. I also like the idea of heading each piece with a quote. Mhmm... if this were on deviantART, I'd favorite this. ^_^ Okay, that be all, Mizamour.

Cheers,

Bradley

Keep going Amber. Very good.
Reminds me a bit of Mirror Mirror.

Hey, if you're remaking Snow White, why don't you put it on fictionpress?

I really like this chapter, and the whole concept in general. I like the way she's almost obsessed by SW.

Unfortunately, you've managed to be just a bit to vague in this chapter. The first is whimsical, dreamy, but you still understand what's happening. In this, I can't tell what's going on at all. Has Gerel taken her away, or not? Are they just not talking? what's with the treasury comment? I'd love you to re-write this, because it's intriguing, I just don't understand.

Good start! I can see what you're setting up. Hope you keep it up!

I like it very VERY much. :-D It's beautiful, and flowing... ;-) I updated Snow-Flower; please update this!

Schweet. And yes, I meant to say schweet. Your writing style has matured so much...I love the darkness and vibrancy of your prose. Short chapter, yes, but utterly amazing. I think a small dose of writing like this is best, so we don't all perish of pure awe.

Very very good!

O, this is good!