Yay! n_n Glad you updated. Yeah, that chapter was pretty sad, but update soon!

I didn't think chapter 3 was as good as your earlier ones.

If the $10 was for her when she reached 18, why did she get it when she was only 19?

$10 on a few supplies is unrealistic. The currency in the game is closer to cents in value than dollars.

The way she encounters her starter has no feeling in it. And an Eevee? I thought they were rare. I reckon someone in her position, given a Pokemon for free would be lucky to get a common Pidgey or Weedle or something.

Anway, keep at it. I liked the encounter with Surge.

You really... REALLY need to put 'angst' in the genre... Orphans, hated for no reason in particular, outcasts in society, Eevees...? Sorry, but everything in this 'fic is cliche. You have great potential in your writing style, but try to be more original.

Oh, wow. This is getting exciting! Youre storyline is so good! Why cant I have an imagination like that? Damn.

Jesus, two updates in one day! Are you having the fear that the fic will get 'pushed' down by other fics? Don't worry... it takes time, and people manages to read them (Roughly 13 has read my whole fic, that's depressing.).

Again, you could make the chapters longer and/or stack up some pre-written chapters so you can take a break from writing, giving your'self time to think how you'll continue it if you get the famous writer's block!

And yes, that was a depressing chapter, poor lil' girl, now her friend left her... can it get worse?

so far so good. For someone who updates so fast you really are doing a good job.

Wow... a new plot, hm...

Nice twist in the story, but you update a little too fast, I mean one day's break isn't going to kill any one you know... if you write this fast you could either pre-write them or write a little longer chapters!

Aww, poor Kathren. So tragic. Im glad you put the memories in and stuff, they did need to be addressed at some point. Youre writing this really well. Keep up the good work!

Short, yes, and you need to add a longer chapter today if possible. >.>

Aw, man... I feel so sad for her...

Kicked out by two families... fired when it wasn't actually her fault... man, will she get suicide thoughts? I would... damn I got depression while writing all the reviews...

I really pity her. You're really writing from the heart, few can do that! (I'm now using the overused line, be prepared) Keep it up!

Forgot to add in the last chapter to your note, I know how it feels... it sucks, that's why some of my chapters got ridicilousy (mispelled, sorry) long.

Well, it was a short chapter, but it was intensive! Curse those drunks! They might be the manager's kids, hehe. It seems the worls is turnning against her...

Okay, after reading this chapter I don't really mind that she starts with an Eevee, ssorry if it offended you.

Well, she has it pretty hard, now she'll have to get up by 5:30 or earlier to get to work, be careful so she doesnt work herself to death (Which she probably will).

One thing that annoyed me slightly was how her low-level Eevee beat a high level (Okay 15 but that's quite hgh) Voltorb... I mean, Voltorbs are friggin fast and that gives it an advantage. Okay, she got lucky... but remember, high-level usually beat low-level, PERIOD!

Well, anyways, its a good story, don't let this review discourage you... I'm just trying to give you some criticiscm!

I thought I could start my review here on Chapter 2!

It had a quite unique start, and some of the lines were pretty funny. Now, I noticed that she started with an Eevee, I'm not flaming you but I hope you are aware of how RARE Eevee actually is, watch out for the Mary-Sue plague (Whatever that is but I've noticed it had with girls and Eevees to do with it).

Anyway, 150 hours? That's alot of time and for a military guy? She's so in for it now, I will read the next chapter right now!

Ah, update soon.

Hm... Good.