Wow, this story is a nessary, if you know what i'm saying ^_^

Very nice...I love it! You got a excellent way on telling the story. Don't be discouraged now, I "know" you can finish this good story!

Well, I'm not trying to be mean or anything but, you need to put more excitement into this. Also, why is Mario and Peach already married? I mean, has Mario even met Daisy yet?

Sounds good so far please continue.