Wow...that is awesome...This is the best story i've ever read on envies beggining.. The chracters were excellen so well portrayed and just...simply wonderful. Im dissappointed with the lack of reviews to tell the truth..

I love that story :D Poor Envy...


That's probably one of the best Envy fics I've ever read!

Envy's begin has always interested me- and for once, I found that this really did it justice. I really like how you portrayed Hohenheim here, how detached and dispassionate- even with the line,
"I've created a monseter, how cliche."

But Envy (William) seemed in character too- the want of attention, the random street-rat qualities, the murder and vanity. It was all awesome. BEtter than awesome,m I just can't find the words.
Faving!

Great job!

So Envy was looking for approval the whole time, and Dante was looking for someone to love?

Great fic!

Um, wow? That was amazing~ ♥;`
Never read a fic like this one before. & I love it!

This is--hands down--the best story on Envy.

i dont read much Envyt or Hohenheim centric but this was very awesome.

you have a wide vocabulary, and i can tell your pretty smart. you can make things flow. One thing is: its sort of confusing, like in the part where Hohenheim woke up from the dream. And like the ending, you dont realize Hohenheim is Envy until you let it sink in. Unless you want it that way.

This story really made me think, and the beginning was absolutely brilliant.

you are a wonderful and talented writer, id like to see something a bit brighter from you...(havent checked your profile yet)

--Aaba-chan

Wow, that was great! I'd never though about how Dante used to act or how Envy was when he was first created. This was really, REALLY good!

Brilliant, I really enjoyed this. ^_^

My my, you have talent! It flowed gracfully and elegantly. You must be an eloquent speaker or very intellectual. If I didn't have a short attention span or if I had a greater deal of patience, I still don't think that I'd be able to write something quite like that! I'm rather jealous, really...

Ye gods, this is good. Elegantly written, intelligently planned.
I like it very much.

0.0 wow... Wow wow wow!! I liked this. Wow... WOW... That's all I can say about this, I think. And it was long... and I kept imagining it taken place at Flannery and Sophies house... ... . ... yeah... congrats on the story!

Great story, its unlike the others that attempted writing about Envy`s first years.