I am not sure if I was suppose to laugh but the last sentence really cracked me up ^^;

I like the story and the ideas it conveys. You capture a really disciplined Sage really well. And your description is fantastic! it really creates a picture in my head, of their surroundings.

I really liked the way he interacted with the little girl; I thought that was really sweet of him how he felt he could provide that parental love for her as well.

The only thing that bothered me is the commentary about the characters. It's so formal and different than what I have read before. But I know that your intentions and your style. It just irritated me a bit, but that's just me and one of my pet-peeves.

One thing I was a bit unclear about was Sage, from what I was able to grasp he teaches at his family dojo, but isn't he at college at the time? And seems like everyone wants him to get married which I didn't find strange since that's part of the culture.

Anyways,

I really like it! And want to see where you go from here. The child he was starring into that scared him, I thought was himself when he was young rebellious. That's what I connected that to unless I am mistaken. Which can also be connected to his really subdued state in attitude, and the child was reminding him of that other part of him from years ago. He did after all sound really nostalgia before entering the basement. But that’s just the ideas I got from it…^^;

Oh my gosh, please update!! I want to know what happens so bad!! It's so hard to find good fanfiction nowadays (and good RW/YST fanfiction at that), but I really, really like your story. And that was really creepy. I didn't see that coming at all. I was thinking that maybe the storage house was going to collapse or something like that, but I never imagined that a little girl/boy ghost child would be in there. And to have them reach out and grab you. *shudders* Man, it sucks to be Seiji (in this instance). No doubt his parents/neighbors are going to have a fit about that "little" gash on his arm. But I really like your writing style. Simply put...it doesn't suck. In fact, I think it's wonderful, and I'm very picky, VERY, VERY, VERY picky about fanfiction. So please, please, please (what's with me putting things in pairs?) update!! I know it's been nearly two months, but I know you can do it!

...Thats creepy...yet in some way cool...I LOVE IT! Please keep posting!

*blink* cool

wow thats amazing! i like the story alot, i hope u keep working on it! i hate when peopel give up their stories half way through :( it makes me sad. keep up the good work!

Okay, that last line, gave me chills.

Once again, a lovely story from you, many applause for an update, and since we know I can't crit to save anyone's life, I'll just say the following:

Anyone with a visual imagination, such as myself, will be seeing a damned child's face until all hours of the night. Thanks darling. ;)

so Creepy...not got "tbc"or "end" so what happened next?