This is so exciting, and I loled at the bacon part XD, Keep up this good story!

Love it.. I stumbled on your first 3 chapters on your Splatterdrops site, so glad I found this one here. I hope you haven't forgotten about it. You've portrayed the characters beautifully.

An awesome story. Especially the Ephraim bit, about him not being happy - I could relate to that.
Keep up the good work.

Your plot and character development are impeccable. The twinspeak between Eirika and Ephraim comes to mind as being especially fitting, especially given the canonically strange way FE characters tend to speak. Also, wou seem to have perfected the art of giving us just enough to keep us going and not make us angry about how Saleh is a repressed, oblivious idiot.
UNLESS IT'S AN ACT AND HE ACTUALLY ISN'T.
I seem to remember you saying something about a greedy ego in the last chapter? This is me, a reviewer, reviewing, and saying that I physically *need* more of this story. Pleez?

Not bad, not bad. I can't see any gaping plot holes, nor overly OOC characters, and the narration's great ( near to perfect).

I would suggest that you continue this story. This is a story that one should not abandon.

Overall the chapter was okay. I do like the story as a whole and I loved Tethy's and Ewan's conversation. Hehe . . . the bacon. The fight with Franz was very good but when Saleh entered the picture . . . it was awkward and didn't seem to fit. I really don't know how to say it but it just wasn't right around that certain area.

Hum... I'd love to be really useful, truly I would, but sadly I haven't played this particular FE. HOWEVER, from the little I've seen (parts of the game, other fics, supports), the characters seem nicely in character.
I love your style, and the wit of Ewan and Thethys's dialogues.
The only crit i'd have is for thelast chapter, where the scene when he collapses would have needed a bit more explanation. I was kinda lost at that point.
Otherwise, very good. You get a fave and a watch^^

Heh. This one is amusing. Nice to finnaly find out who Eirika's husband is. I can see that you struggled some writing this, though. It feels kinda jerky and rough, as if you were having trouble making the various parts of the chapter connect to eachother.

Okay, for characters. Eph and Eirika worked fine. I have no trouble seeing Eirika growing up into a responsible queen while Ephraim just...doesn't grow up much at all. He seems like the kind of guy who would be stuck in his early 20s forever, so he worked well. Ewan and Saleh though...didn't work for me this time. Thier interaction seemed really forced, especially the part where Ewan was avoiding his teacher and such. That whole part of the chapter just felt really weak. Not sure how to put a finger on exactly what it was about it though.

Well, overall it was still alright. Definately your weakest chapter, but I'll hang on and wait for chapter 5 all the same. Sorry I couldn't be more helpful in the review.

I realy love this story! Both the premise and the pairing. I'm full of hope for it's continuance. Much love!

I suck at constructive criticism, so can I say that it was excellent?

One of the first SalehxEwan fics I've seen. Keep up the good work!

ah...Tethys...I love her...and the bacon! lol!
Ephraim and Eirika's talk was suprising, I wonder what you have in store for him!^^
Well, glad to see you haven't given up on this, hope to read more soon!!^^

>.< I can't give any good and constructive criticisms on plot or character development to save my life. I'm not a good writer or a very good reviewer myself ;_; But can I hope to make it up to you with lots of love for this update? Because I fairly screamed when I got the story alert for this story. :X

Oh, you have no idea how much I squealed when I saw this was updated. :D I really didn't see much wrong with the chapter -- I really liked the character interactions, and the duel was written wonderfully (something I couldn't do if my life depended on it). The part at the end with Ewan and Tethys made me giggle uncontrollably. I adore this story, really, and there simply isn't enough Saleh/Ewan stuff out there. I am extremely eager to see the next chapter. :D

Wow, this is really good. There are way too few SS fics out there... it's so underloved. Update soon!!

~Hoshi