What happened to this wonderful story? Please don't let it die...it is too good to pass. I just hope you consider finishing this piece.

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Sherazade...

"Do what thy will, but shall harm none."

very good! whana reade more about it.. =) so please hurry up!

Great story so far, hope to read more soon.

interesting

this is really good and I like where this story is going. Please write more

I love this story so far and can't wait for an update.

Good start! One thing I noticed is that you could do with making sure you employ fresh phrases and terms to keep things smooth. For example:

"The article went on to describe how Obi-Wan and Anakin...

The article went on to explain that both Jedi had...

The article then went on...

The article had then ended..."

Some new turns of phrases and inverted sentences would be great.

PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I AM WAITING ON THE EDGE OF MY SEAT PLEASE UPDATE SOON OR I WILL EMAIL U OVA AND OVA AND TRUST ME I WILL MUHAHAHA

great

keep writing, please...
great story.
May the Force be with you!

It's a good start, but two things you might want to keep in mind.

First, you have two of the same chapter; this is no doubt a mistake. Just thought I point it out though just in case you might have missed it.

Also, you really might want to think about making the chapters longer. That way you can have more room to develop your idea better.

Anyway, again it’s a good start and I look forward to future chapters. Take care