Short and sweet. Good take on what really went through his head, this part always has confused me slightly. Keep writing!

Nicely done. Well thought out, and well portrayed. You have really caught the feeling of this scene. This was an amazing insight into Bartleby's thoughts. The perfect length, too! Anymore would have been an overkill. Please keep writing!

Perfect! Totally brillant fic! Fit the characters and their attiudes wonderfully. Great job.

Man that was...terrifying. Very good writing showing just how irrational Bartebly was during that entire affair. Just like an animal, a very cool portrayal I think

Oooh, I love it! I like your take on this, I really like the growing insanity in Bartleby's mind. Good stuff, wish there was more!

It actually makes a lot of sense, and I like the broken sentences. I think it adds to the mood of the story.

Ooh. I hadn't thought of it that way...I always wondered just why Bartleby killed Loki, and I always wondered what they were both thinking. Nice job, very insightful.

Wow, that's so sad, like what he was thinking and why he killed him, well good ole bart was kind if Insane! But we'll overlook that shall we, I really enjoyed it

Damn, that was pretty good. I like who you wrote in Bartlebys' thoughts, defenitely sounded insane (I am the expert on that subject). I like his resoning for killing him too... killing him to save him. So sad but true. Well, I really liked this one, keep up the great work.

Good fic, really captures the depth of Bartleby's insanity, too. I don't know if that's what you were going for, but that's how I interpret(sp?) it. Very good writing.

Ooooooh! Nice! That's a pretty good reason for him doing that...

Wow. Dark. Makes sense. I like it.

Wow. That's all I have to say. Wow.

Nice and dramatic. Good story. "Keep it up, kid!"

:click: Favorites! Now! Wow... woah... love the style, the broken sentances... normally taken as a bad thing, but in this snippit... wow. :gasps for breath: Do I sense slashy waters being treaded? _ If so, that's most definatly a good thing, gotta love slash. Whew...that was incredible. Short..but incredible. And for once, with something this...sorry to be repetative...incredible I'm not going to ask for anything like a sequel. No need. Perfect. Leave it where it is. Wow. !Jemariel