_ That was a nice read!

Have to say that I chuckled through most of this one :) great choice of episode to use.

“Line number one,” I think that's supposed to be 'Lie' instead of 'Line'.

And I think you're missing a 'had' between Wilson and decided.

"He had been thinking about whether or not Wilson decided to take an interest in Cameron;"

Overall I'd say that your phrasing needs minor changing so that you go from describing the scene to letting the reader create the scene. This, I think comes with practice, or, in my case, several good quarters of creative writing class.

“Maybe she ignored it, figured she had a cold,” Foreman assumed. Assumed is a boring word and possibly not the implication you want based on the rest of the sentence. During these sessions they're hypothesizing and brainstorming. Change "assumed" to a reflect that its not an assumption but a line of thought and it gives the sentence a different feel. "Maybe she ignored it, figured she had a cold," Foreman offered/interjected/hypothesized.

Same thing here. “Hey, it’s either that or she missed her exit on the turnpike and wound up in Africa.” Foreman looked as if he wanted this debate to end."

At this point in the episode, Foremen is fairly pissed at House and finds the African Sleeping Sickness theory to be more than a long shot. Attitude is coming out in spades.

"Hey, it's either that or she missed her exit on the turnpike and wound up in Africa." Foreman jibed.

This sentence is setup incorrectly.

“No!” House frowned at him, and inwardly James knew that he been too quick to answer. Technically it could be read that House says "No!" As we go from House looking on with amusement to House frowning and no mention of Wilson responding.

"What the spice gone from our relationship already?” He looked at Wilson, amusement sparkling in his eyes.

“No!” and then Wilson flushed as House frowned at the too quick response.

lol. That was well written. I loved the whole medical part, it made it feel like a real episode. I especally loved the end bit with Cameron, I can just picture House's reaction!

lovely! The House/Wilson always satisfies :) You also seem to know a hell of a lot about medical junk, which is something any other average House fanfic hack sorely lacks. I give you two thumbs up and ask you to write more House/Wilson!

The middle section about diagnosing those patients kind of droops and I mostly skimmed over it. It's fairly unnecessary in this fic, I think. The beginning and ending is wonderful though.

Heh love the ending

"Well stay away, he's mine."

cracked me up _

Nice idea, interspersing the actual dialogue with the added bits, and the concept is good, although I would have liked to see more original dialogue. Established House/Wilson is unusual and I like it.

One correction: the actual line Cameron says to House is, "Nice try, but you're a misanthrope, not a misogynist." (I.e. he hates people in general, not women in particular.)

I look forward to reading more of your work.