Absolutely wonderful!

This story is amazing!

Aw! This makes me excedingly happy.

*tear*

Aw!

I like the fact that she is reading Terry Pratchett. That makes me happy :)

WooT. Go u! Me wuv ur stori! If onli I found this sooner... N'ways, despite my jealousy ], I hafta admit, ur talented. Teehee. Keep on writing other fantastic stories!

Muah .s2.

Okay, I take back the one criticism from my previous review. Mr. Incredible is completely 3-D here and very well-written. All-in-all, a great ending. Have I mentioned that I love the jokes about cheesy romantic cliches?

Well, as you know, I normally hold cheesy romance in the same high regard as Bratz, Britney Spears, and the color pink. But I have to say that it works quite well (rather surprisingly) for Syndrome, particularly in this story. This chapter had several *aaw* moments. Two little things: 1)You're still writing Mr. Incredible pretty one dimensional. I realize that he's not an important character here and therefore not your primary focus, but sometimes he just sounds dumb. 2) I don't think Syn would have the trace of smugness in his voice if he's as worried-as-hell as you wrote him.

AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! I love angsty little pushing-loved-ones-out-of-the-path-of-falling walls/avalanches/bullets/throwing knives/phaser beams/etc scenes. They're so fun. I also like the line about "It has also been duly noted, although Syndrome apparently forgot, that it is an extremely bad idea to turn one's back on one's enemy when he's still alive."

Woohoo! Fight scene! My favorite part is the line about the two halves of herself clicking together. Very profound, and it ties up the issues mentioned earlier in the story. Oh, and I'm going to be anal and protest a detail about the taxi driver. Six fifty? Six fifty will get you like four blocks. Oh, I like the closing line. Very confident, very optimistic.

Hm...Syn apologizing...this could be interesting...

Well, Mirage let go of her anger a little too quickly, but other than that I really liked this chapter, possibly more than all the rest so far. Syndrome's little tirade as he gets carried aways playing the bad guy really illustrated the flawed and conflicting emotions inside him. Bex's reaction was totally on-target as well, and Syndrome's swearing felt absolutely right, not gratuitous at all.

Ah, smut is so much fun. Seriously, however, your transition into mature fanfiction continues smooth as ever. The last three paragraphs are poetry. The pillow talk/bantering was absolutely hilarious.

Nice inter-group chemistry. Looking forward to some angsty Syndrome what-have-I-done scenes, hopefully. Maybe Mirage should be feeling just a twing more jealousy towards Bex?