ohhhhh you need to update this! :)

Oh wow. This is really great. Bravo!

wow.

your writing is magnificent. i was completely enthralled with every single word that was written.

absolutely amazing. one of the best fics i've ever read. no doubt!

excellent work!

A great story. Very good.

Is this all? I sense there should be more to this story. I hope you find what you need to update, and until then I'll be waiting.

This is the first ever X-Men fan fiction I've read. I love it. Oh, do I.

Wow! That's all I can think of right now-just wow. Amazing story(one-shot?) Then ending was a bit...I don't know. I sorta liked it but I want to know more so I don't like it. Confusing I know but it's still great.

I don't think 'wow' is a strong enough word! Awesome.

wow... that was beautiful. completely breathtaking. wonderful.

wonderful job. The pathos, the tone, the mood and characterization were great. Absolutely awesome job.

I thought it was beautiful. Beautiful and dark. Minus the heavy dose of angst, it was ... almost perfect. (Okay, the thousand heavy implications really went over my head in places.)

Normally I detest this type of story, but the style of writing, the choice of words, the flow of language, well, all I can say is that I loved it.

Minus the ending. I was really getting into the fic, short as it was, and bam. I'm hit in the face with an ending that's too abrupt.

Now, don't get me wrong about this. I really liked the *idea* of the ending (just like the star-crossed romances Scott keeps talking about.) But it was the *way* you wrote that ending that ... well, it rubbed me the wrong way.

That one sentence just seemed *too* short and abrupt, and I guess it didn't fit in with the smooth flow and long sentences. Maybe you should keep the basic feeling the same, but elongate the last line? I dunno, you're the writer here, after all... (I feel kind of dumb harping about one little line so much, and I'm really sorry I wasn't what you'd call succinct, but like I said, the rest of the story was *quite* good.)

This is, quite simply, a fantastic piece of writing. Cryptic, wonderfully written, expressive... I could go on for days. Great job.

And the ending...! Gyaah, an anti-climax, but perfect!

Uh... I don't actually know what to say. I really like the writing style, very very much. Actually, I liked the whole thing, but that last sentence... well, if I did get it, I can just say 'damn, what the hell? poor scott' And if I didn't get it... than I didn't get it. But I liked it.

You're evil.

At first, that was all I had to say, but then I decided to add that you're a really good writer. And, you're evil.

Crap! You just *had* to end it like that?

It's so beautiful, the language, style, everything is just... wow.