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| Vana Tuivana 2005-09-06 ch 1,  | abuseHeh... I wrote a fic of the same title, though not the same subject. You know what they say about great minds thinking alike? ;D This is interesting. I love how it took so long for Fingon to come up with an answer he deemed appropriate - that of revenge - as if he didn't know himself why he went but felt that he must. And I get the feeling that Maedhros doesn't believe him from that little smile at the end. The only thing is, I think the end is rather spoiled by the abrupt change in topic, "Shall we go hunting?" I understand what you're trying to do from a writer's perspective, but perhaps it would have been "neater" and more to-the-point to linger on that uncertainty at the end - make the reader continue to ponder the issue rather than 'Okay, everyone, time to move on!' It might be more effective that way. Me and my nitpicks; what can I say? The truth is, everyone does a Maedhros-Fingon-rescue scene (actually, *I* haven't yet... perhaps I should...) but you have managed to make yours truly original. Wonderful writing. |