|Reviews for Journey For You|
| Gosurori-Otaku 8/5/08 . chapter 1
Um... this is okay, I guess, but it could be a lot better.
Like, there's not a lot of grammar in this, and I'd be interested to know how someone can ask stuff while being out cold: '“May I know your names?” I asked unconscious.'
Do a rewrite and do some editing on the summary, and you'll proably get more readers.
It's an interesting idea, I must say, but you could do so much better than this.