In a way, it's true. The chapter seems to be a bit rushed at the end. But well, better rushed than a longer but maybe worse battle scene. I can imagine, that it's hard to write battle.

I'm not sure, if I just overread this, but I was a bit confused about why Miroku and Kohaku were under Naraku's spell. Did you mention that in one of the earlier chapters?

But I'm really looking forward to the next/last chapter.
The Evil is gone (mostly, at least - because I'm still not sure about Kasumi), so on with a happy ending for our heroes! (^_~)
I'd love to see a Kai/Kiyoshi ending (I think, I repeat myself here *sigh*), although they both seem to be dead at the moment. And also, I'd like to know about what's going to happen with Chandra and Shippo...

So, I'll be looking out for the final.
(^_^)/~~ for now.

I love your writing style! I think it's very detailed and "fine-lined" ((you can ask me what that means in 6th). I am very proud of your work, so i think you should keep on writing!1

-Eric((the girl you know...lol...:)

Hey, long time no see (^_~)

Character deaths?
And Kai one of the first? That's just not fair. *cries*

But then again, seeing the statement of a 'relatively happy ending' I'll keep hoping there's a way out of this mess.
Since Kiyoshi's introduction into this story I've always wanted to see THEIR happy ending... *sighs dreamily*

Anyways, it's nice to come back to after a few weeks and seeing some new chapters. I just wished, I had more time to come here more regularly. Only having internet access at work really sucks! Although sometimes it has its advantages always having more than one chapter to read. (^_~)
Keep up your with your story, so I have something to look forward to.

Kai- "See you in hell"

...What a wonderous thing to say as you descend to hell...Who knows? Maybe she jinxed it and went to heaven? One can only dream...Not that I am...erm, anyways:

Hey! I only found like, one mistake! You really ARE getting better! Heh, expect a hug tomorrow; because I'm just gonna walk up to you and hug ya!

If you read this AFTER I do it; then you'll know why I did it...But um, I may forget...

BURNY!

-Laurie

p.s-hee hee...I started laughing at the disclaimer...You should've had a Pepsi can in your pocket...lmao

P.s.s-Update soon! :D

dude... did just say ya'll? that is the first time i heard you say that ya hick!! hahahaha loser!! just kidding.. cant wait to see you on mnday!

u wrote:
Discalimer: I don't own Inuyasha...do I have to do this again? (lawyers appear and nodded) Damn it who gave you a key! (Someone giglgles from inside my closet) great...

that was funny, and ur story is getting better by the chapter. its kool and u should take that creative writing class u mentioned.

Adam

i like stories with great plots and twists, and this is definitly one of them. awesome job. im reviewing every other chapter cause im lazyy

that was awesome!! i am not saying that because i have never seen the show, or because i have no idea who the characters are. i am saying this because the writing and plot was great! i could actually follow along and see how the characters behave and act. out of 10 stars: 9 1/2

heheheh...If you owned Inuyasha; I'd hate to know what you'd do to him XP...

Wow, I just cybernetically died...Update soon!

I Love The Chapter:13 Plz Plz Update It Soon!!

I Love The Chapter:12 Plz Plz Update It Soon!!

Wow...That disclaimer IS getting old! Oh well...Darn cliffhangers! GR! XP

Mel: Your so stupid
Laurie: NO ME AM NOT! AH!! (runs into wall)
Mel: You look pretty stupid to me...

Now everything gets pretty tense!

I just hope, Kiyoshi has an alibi - not that everybody else thinks that he has hurt Kai, too. Naraku is really mean to play his old little tricks again. It would be too bad, if he succeeded with this once more.

But I have faith in you (^_~), since you've partly promised a happy ending. And keep on plotting, because I don't like stories, that are predictable. But so far you've managed to keep this interesting.

The only thing I'm wondering now, is what role Sesshomaru, Rin and Jaken will play in the next chapters.

Concerning your writing: Don't worry, it isn't bad. Whoever thinks that it is should try writing an own story to see how difficult that can be.
Your chapters just have a few mistakes (like missing letters...) that I think result from not enough proof readers. I know how hard it is to find mistakes in a selfwritten text. Everything else is pretty fine.

And about your disclaimer: Sure, it makes no sense, but it's funny (and the truth, too - so nobody can say anything...)!

Heh like I'm gonna review this little story! Oh wait...I already am...ACK! What was I thinking?! And it sucks that you only have like, 10 reviews in this thing. That happened with my first fanfiction...God I hate that story...And this things almost done? You suck!

tee hee, there were ravens in here...:D