Absolutely wonderful writing, right here. Your imagery was excellent, and your use of bolding words like you did helped add to the emotion. Well done.

I'm a bit of a Severus/Lily shipper myself, so the beginning of this story amused me greatly. ;) Go you.

Wonderful job!

I love it! i hope you'll continue writing Harry Potter fanfic!

My eyes were full of tears when I read this. Such a sad story...*sniff*

Bloody brilliant! I wish it were longer though. GO SLYTHERINS!

At first I thought that it was Hermione you were writing about, until i saw "clear emerald eyes". =P I like whole bold lettering thing. Poor ickle Snivvy Snivelly Snivellus! I'll be expecting a sequel for this, and you're gonna make one, whether you like it or not.

Let me try to sum this up and get straight to the point.

More. Now. Please?!