Incredible story thank you and great job!

great story ne

"I hope that you won't continue to practice that vulgar display of macrophagia in this house." This was Ayeka pontificating.

Macrophagia?

So Ayeka hopes he/she doesn't continue to practice that vulgar display of White Blood Cells... The hell this doesn't make any sense

I know both, and you combined it and the mix is awesome

wow, you made ranma look like shinji ikari in this first chapter by forgiving them and that really piss's me off. but apart from that i can see nothing wrong with the story

Uh-oh

Okie, so the brainwash incident not only have no proportional consequent - being resolved in this chap with what is practically a harsher version of Kasumi's lecture, you chose to inform instead of tell the struggle in Ranma's head and supposedly death of the original Ranma persona and Maoling persona...

Oh, and Khu Lon said sorry because Ranma was powerful. So when she's more powerful, she can do whatever she want to a person, and when that person is more powerful than her, she said sorry. Practically no change from chapter 1. Making sympathizing with her harder.

And the part about being the best of both world was rushed at best.

Up till chapter 3: The writing is nice, the concept is intriguing, but the pacing overall seem rushed and the execution is not very attention catching or satisfying.

Not that I can write any better, but I figure after all those ranting, I should try a bit at constructive critic?

K' I'm torn

The writing was good, and I like Ranma, and I like Cabbit.

But Ranma getting brainwashed, locked as a girl, stripped of his frigging identity, just so the Amazon could get their pawn on the one thing he want to protect: Link-ohki, and he could forgive and forget after a few words?

Ranma never struck me as the forgiving kind when it come to his identity and things he's protective over.

I don't know, it doesn't feel right. IMO, if you bothered to introduce such an event in your story, it should have a proportion consequent.

May be I haven't read to that part yet, but still, in the scope of this chapter, it's anticlimactic?

This is really good I can't wait to see what happens next. Please continue!

Well, apparently sentience/intelligence is an STD now? And the bomb attack at the end of the chapter was extremely random.

But I am enjoying this story quite a bit. It's just that having to overlook things like that means it's only pretty good, not great.

"Nyanchicsu"? Seriously? I mean, if you are going to use the actual name of the tribe instead of the general "Amazon", you could at least have the decency to look up how to write the word correctly! Frankly, after reading that one word I do not trust you to write a good, logically sound story anymore. So, someone else will have to review the rest of your story. Better luck next time.

One of many stories that I have stumbled across, this one seems to fit a very small niche. Although changing the spring that Ranma falls into is kinda common, adding in the cabbit egg, and the entire Tenchi Muyo universe to boot, is very different. Spring of not quite Drowned Cabbit is a bit of a mouthful but it works well in the long run, even if it does take Ranma completely out of the original story line though not out of character.

Although it is well balanced and thought out in the beginning, the story seems to be rushed in the last few chapters. Also the ridiculously long life times of Tenchi and Yosho as they show up at the end of the story after 50 thousand years seems a bit outside the realm of possibility. How they made it this far ahead in time should have at least been touched on. But I digress, even with the rush at the end it is a good fanfic.

An interesting story from beginning to end. I like Ranma's evolution, even if I feel he got a fairly powerful upgrade from being part Masu/cabbit. Love the way that he and Ryoki fell in love for each other though. Stupidly cute.

I've always enjoyed the Ranma empire stories. Terraforming other planets, giving birth to a new nation of people. Yay for the cabbit army. )

Thanks for the enjoyable story. I hope you plan on writing some more stuff soon.

Nice story!

very good story. very concise. This would also serve as an interesting starting point for several other stories that could expand on this.

three cabbits vs any given faction in the galaxy equals devastation. This ought to be good