Very nice story. I love your writing style. At first, I thought that Este was the good sister, but you surprised me. The end is so sad!

it was so angsty and so sad. i thought este was insane, still do actually. ela did not deserve everything that happened to her, she was good and she told the truth. i guess, the truth is never something one wants to hear.

You have lots of detail and your story is beautifully crafted. Just make sure the reader knows when you change POV's otherwise you get confused.

WOW. I'm speechless. But I will tell you one thing you are so going on my favorite authors list!

i don't kno if this is wierd, but somehow, I can't bring myself to like Arimela...at all

Wow !

These are wonderfully descriptive pieces but they are a bit confusing. SO it is about 2 girls one Este and the ohter Arimela. They have a younger sister and their mutual parent a father is still alive. Yet during this ball where some random man seduces Este where are they?

And Arimela is considered arrogant for being the last one in a mask? Was it the prince she was talking to?>

And why is Este being seduced in public ? I assume that was what the Prince/cute man loking at when Arimela was backing out of the way?

You must explain it to me. I am confused, I think

Love
Gigi...

Yes, work on something! Anyway, that was fantastic. I've been reading WAY too many badly written stories recently; this was SO refreshing. And so sad. It wasn't even bittersweet. There was no sweet. No one ended happy, but at the same time I'm not horribly depressed! I like how Fermimly was in the last chapter, it told the audience that everything was sort of a secret and that life still goes on for others. And by the end the only character who you liked got the worst end of the deal. I mean, that prince was evil.
Ok, that was a half-way serious reveiw... that, like, never happens. I blame my stupid English Final that was supposed to be just a normal test, but my English teacher is evil. NEVER read the book 'A Lesson Before Dying'. You can just tell from the title. It's about this teacher whose aunt and the godmother of a wrongfully condemned murdere make him randomly visit the wrongfully-condemned-murdurer until he goes to the chair. The back of the book claims that they make a bond, but really the teacher just gives the WCM a radio and a notebook and then cries when he dies.
Also, now that I'm doing an update on my life, my keyboard is all better! My dad had to order a new one, but he taught me how to replace it, and now I'm like 'I can replace keyboards!' but it's actually kinda funny because there are little arrows under the keyboard to tell you where stuff goes.
Ok... done... but really, fabulous story!

Yea. I'm obsessed with rewriting fairy tales also but mostly Beauty and the Beast. You story was really good but kind of confusing. I could figure out who was talking when and such and when the scenes changed.

The ending was perfect! I can see, with all the emotion you put into this story, how it might come off as difficult. But it ended most appropriately.

Wonderful!

I AM SO JELOUS! I'm sorry, but your writing is amazing, you're plot is spectacular, and Este is so evil! The story is wonderful, and I am dying yo read the rest.

Have I told you yet how much I love the way you are writing this? It's so simple and gorgeous.

And now Arimela is making me most frustrated.

Ooh, yes... definitely one more part, por favor. You can't just leave it hanging at the altar! LOL... But overall, I still really like your style of writing and the basic premise; talk about turning it upside down. :-P

~Areida

Of course you shouldn't end it here! I don't envy the task of finishing it, but you definately shouldn't end it here! Wow... Arimela switched personalities. And my keyboard did get better, thanks for asking! It's actually not that late. Usually it's like midnight and I'm online for no reason and decide 'hey, I'm gonna read some fanfiction!' and so I do. I almost never read fanfics during the day. I'm probably secretly a vampire...

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