Reviews for Reaver Attack! Challenge

Reviews For: Reaver Attack! Challenge

Jay186 2006-12-11 ch 1, anon.	abuseI relly enjoyed that it was written as a news report, it was great
Cpt.ShaneSchofield 2006-04-05 ch 1,	abuseJust found this, amazingly captivating.
Lucas Harper 2005-09-28 ch 1,	abuseEnjoyed this immensly. Hope you get many more reviews because isn't it always nice and shiny to get 'em? :) ~Luc~
Marianne Pickles 2005-09-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseGrammar Police Reporting In: I just read your entry and I have to say I thought it was brilliant. As a student who spends so much time studying English Literature (and Classical Literature, just for the record!) it is so refreshing to read a text that has been written by someone who clearly has a grasp of the English language and how to use it! You put across the plot in an ordered and effective way, making good use of paragraphs, pauses and repetition for effect. Your use of vocabulary is also very impressive: you manage to use uncommon and official-sounding words without degrading the tone, which again is highly commendable! Sometimes people use words which are too high for the level of the rest of the text and, therefore, the tone is distrupted and it's just embarrassing and cringe-making! The only slightly negative thing I'd say was that in about three places your use of syntax is quite strange (what I like to call a 'Yoda Moment'). However, this is not a huge issue, and does not take anything away from the over-all integrity of the piece. It's such a shame that you have to cut it because it really is a successful piece of work. It doesn't happen often, but I am giving you my professional thumbs-up. I have read many a novel that is far less well crafted than this. Well Done! Gold Star! Top of the Class! Keep Up the Good Work! Additional Generic Statement of Praise! Honestly though, good work. And you have the opportunity, maybe you should try to spread the word about the correct use of English. Maybe with informative leaflets. I would appreciate it! Marianne
Kathy 2005-09-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseI was captivated by every moment of the story Marcus Li told,. And as the tension mounted, as it quickly did, I found my eyes travelling faster and faster over the text. I had to keep reading, take the journey with them...hear of the horrors... and hope the people would manage to get get free. Excellent, exciting, scary...vivid! Great stuff...keep up the good work!

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