How cruel that you leave us to wonder if something happened to Heero or he just wasn't around at the time (or maybe he didn't want to save her... but that couldn't be).

Well, it was filled with fantastic descriptions just the same. Great writing! You have some fantastic talent!

Wait. What? Complete? If you ever thought of extending this, I would love to see how it played out. Btw, check out your use of the word "quench." I could be wrong, but I don't think it's used as a reference to dryness.

Aw... That's so sad. I hope Heero didn't die in the fire or something... I dunno. IT'S SAD!

OH... WHAY HAPPENS NXT? I AM NOW HOOKED! GREAT JOB AND KEEP UP THE FANTASTUC WORK! YOUR FIC. JUST GRABBED MY ATTETION LIKE THAT! *SNAPS* :)

omg, this story has been veri detailed in a great way. i love it.

aww that was sad...

Ohh. Magnificante! Absolutely amazing writing here. You had me hooked from the very first paragraph; trust me, i'm qwuite a hard person to get addicted to stories. But yours had me enthralled by the very first LINE!

But when i am hooked, i am hooked lol. So this is great. Even though its only the first chapter, i have a lot of faith that this will evolve into a very good story.

Please continue. I'd love to see the results.

...Wow... I think I'm going to sit here and relish in the beauty of it all. That was very well written, and incredibly descriptive.

omg ... heero didnt save her? but ... why? update? or is this a one-shot?