" hey if you wanna get laid by an angel, you go ahead and do it" heeheehee. Funny. Good story!

I must say that in this story you managed to make me love silent Bob even more but HATE your main charaters. I must say the Chance is very immature and she is a spoiled brat. I don't think that Bethany would be able to raise anyone that badly especially if it was a scion.

this is a great story!i love it!keep up the good writing! YA ok!

Oh, sweet... I like.

Hey! I LOVED your story! It was really good! I know what its like to rush a story to a love scene! It loses description, too much talking! This is just an idea, so you don't lose description and rush it. Instead of starting at the start of the story, start at the love scene or whatever! That's how i do it sometimes!

Anyways, its a really good story! Keep up the great work!

P.S. I have a thing for Matt Daemon so yeah...LOL!

Oh! I loved this! I just love Matt and he played Loki really well; he's my favorite charater. Anyways. I really love this fic! And please don't ever delete it! Let more Dogma fans read this as I had the pleasure, I am sure they will too! Good luck in your writing skills!

that was cute

Wow! This is just so...Mary Sue.

Good story. charaters should have a little more development though. it was not a very emotionally involved story. Very good concept though

Awww! I just saw the movie yesterday cause my bro kept bugging me and i fekt so bad for loki (i know it;s only a movie) but he changed at the end, and matt d is such a sweetheart, so this is a great story!

I know I use this word far too often but...I'm sorry, that was just so cute! The only thing is, you shouldn't just have things happening bang-bang-bang, you should write about emotions and stuff. Other than that, awesome. Keep up the good work.

Hmmmmm...very, uh...uh...could be better. You want to become a better writer, you gotta learn to slow things down a bit, give the characters a chance to develop, let there be a conflict which would change them from who they were at the beginning to where they stand at the end. Just like the movie (Dogma) did for Bethany...It was an alright read tough, just needs some improvements. Your Catholic guardian in the corner. AKA. The Pope.

Interesting concept, but I think you've written it to much in vocabulary, even thought the film is largely language based, I think you need to explore the character's inner feelings a little more deeply, as it is atm its kinda stilted and doesn't really allow any empathy with the characters. It is a good idea though, and has a lot of promise. Writing the actual editted scene could be quite fun too... just my humble opinion.

that was great! I cant wait to see what happens next.

Very nice story, especially cuz Loki's in it (hehehe)