 Salem Saori 2005-09-23 . chapter 1Hey, it was pretty nice. Good vocabulary, sweet pace, the blocking of memories is a great plot point that I always enjoy. The only thing I could complain about was Chris' reaction, "he will be back", that isn't the best thing he could say to sooth Claire. Oh well, it's in-character - such a dumbhead :).
Keep up the swell work. You've got talent.
~Salem Saori |