Absolutely gorgeous! Lovely imagery, lovely emotions, lovely everything. Keep writing. PS Thunderstorms are a normal occurance in Cali during the winter. Just so you know.

omg so god write more write more.

hee.the story was good, kind of a downer. im really just reviewing because the eat your firstborn thing made me laugh.

you write so amazingly the way your words fit together is just like the way you know that snape and hermione go together ... maybe we can hang out sometime you seem very poetic and thas what i look for in a woman hopefully you hvae some meet on those bones of yours ;-)

I loved the word imagery. It was enthralling. Poor ickle remmykins. Is this going to be a one-shot? I would love to read more-it could go in so many directions. Oh the possibilities...
I feel the heartbreak.

this is really really really good. you have to fix the formatting error. i love it, though. is there more? cause there should be.