What's with Brad saying he has more looks than Henry?
Damn, that must have been the greatest and most obvious pathetic lie I've ever heard because as I know it, Henry has the MOST looks, he's drop dead gorgeous!!
And ROFL @ the idea of too much wanting of Henry's eyes. Haha. Would guys really kill for them? Me: Of course they will ;)

But anyhow this is sad, so terribly sad. Poor Haley and most especially, POOR HENRY! T_T I want a Happy Ending!!

THAT WAS GREAT!Pleas update!

I'm a huge fan of Coldplay and the title of the story caught my eye. "I wonder if it has anything to do with the song..." Hehe, sure did. I loved it.

I couldn't help but think of Chris Martin as Michael with the curly dark-blond hair and blue eyes 'n' whatnot. Am I right or is it a coincidence? :P

O.o

OH SNAP!
I finished it!
Good job, mate!
: - )
Loved your fanfic!

Ho ho ho.
Nice opening you've got thur.

I peed my pants while playing the game.
Glad you could make such an inspirational story for everyone to enjoy.

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Honestly, I never got the feeling that Haley felt any real affection for Walter. If she's as bad tempered as you've characterized her, I would have expected her answer to Walter's question to be a blatant "Hell no!"

I thought you were going to wrap this up soon, but the introduction of Michael says differently. I wonder if Henry and Eileen will accept his help, in whatever form it may come in. They don't really have much of a choice, though.

I'm hoping Michael provides a clear-cut explanation of the AntiSacrament and everything that goes with it, because I'm not sure that I get it.

If my memory isn't playing tricks on me, I noticed that you changed the beginning of the last chapter to explain Brad's comment about Henry's eyes. You removed Brad and Eileen's fight, though, which wouldn't have been a problem if you didn't leave in two references to it in the rest of the chapter. Unless that was done on purpose, and the reader was supposed to just assume they had an argument later?

'Til the next chapter!

No... Walter angst! Ag...

So the plot's getting ready to bloom, I see. Good.

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NO!Cliffhangers are the devil!

This is so good, and now you end the chapter like that! Ah!T_T!

Please, please! write more soon!

I am here to review! Finally! The following remarks are in kinda random order.

I agree with SS that the constant 'her's and 'she's and such are a little much. They become repetitive and irritating to the reader. You really only need to make it evident that Haley is not at all herself and go with it.

Eileen's reaction to Brad's death is lacking. Even if she was angry at him, even if she knows that Henry will reveal more at a less pressing time, I think it's unrealistic to say that the shock just subsided. If anything it might propel her into a panic. After all, Brad is dead, and Henry shows up communicating that they are in peril. And how does she know Walter's motives?

Brad's earlier remarks about Henry's eyes are very creepy and really... make me wonder about him. lol It might have been better if in an earlier chapter Eileen had mentioned Henry's eyes to him so it doesn't come so out of the blue.

I'm not really sad that Brad's gone. He was a messed up guy, and I don't know how he could've hidden that from Eileen, except perhaps through money, which doesn't say much for her. Hopefully she'll see the light.

Henry just seemed to leave Haley too quickly. The audience isn't privy to a moment of hesitation or a second glance.

Evil, evil little cliffhanger. Hopefully Haley will survive, though I suppose I shouldn't assume that she's the one in real danger...

This chapter was odd. You had strange little "Run-on" sentences... and if I read 'she' one more time...

Well, you got the content out, at least.

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AH!! Evil, evil cliff-hangers of doom. T-T. This story keeps getting better and better! The plot is really 'thickening', or something like that. Haley's situation is becoming so pitiful, I just feel so sorry for her! And now Walter's possessed her...Arg! I'm getting really cought up in this! Hm, was that Henry yelling at the end? If so, I could think of one person he might be saying that to...^_^! I love this story, and I hope you can update soon!

Oh, and I really like SH4 now. I'm so close to the end it's great! I'm just worried Eileen's too beat up for a good ending...Oh wellz. I can't wait until your next chapter!

So Brad made a little visit to Henry's, eh? Heh heh...

...and now Walter's plan is booming. Cool. Now get on with that next chapter, please.

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There's probably some criteria a work has to fulfill before anyone can properly call it "literature." And unfortunately I don't think we fanfic writers qualify. Boo.

So, er, I was about to review the last chapter as I've been meaning to do for the last week, but you got ahead of me. And all I can think to say at the moment is: Man, this is crazy, and Henry better start runnin'. Oh, and a big YAY for Eileen telling Brad off in the previous chapter. That gave me happy feelings. :D

You use an extensive vocabulary, but make sure that all the words mean what you think they do, even if you found them in a thesaurus. "Circumcising," for instance, I'm very sure is not the proper word you were looking for. Also, "sanguine" is a nice word, but I noticed that you use it a lot, which isn't a necessarily a bad thing. It's just something that catches my eye whenever I read your stuff.

(I like replying to reviews in the story too, since we might want to impart information that all readers would benefit to know, but I guess we must follow the laws from on high. Meh.)

Awesome! I loved it when Eileen fought with Brad. Damn strait(sp?)! Hehe.

I feel so bad for Haley. Is it true that she'll disappear because of Henry? If so, that's horrible! Poor Haley...And the scene with Walter...wow. He's practically torturing her!

X.X Holy begeezus! That last scene was really weird, but it came across increadibly great! I really enjoyed it, and all of the randomly put in words are revieling yet not at the same time. Very good. Still, poor Henry!

This fanfic is really getting interesting(like it wasn't before?)! I can't wait till you update, so I can read more!

Oh, and as a sidenote: I just bought SH4! Yay! Now I can actually try and SEE the story!

Ah, this reminds me of that 'Tenchi in Tokyo' anime... Anyway, things are starting to get interesting. Whatever will happen to Haley if the deed is not done?

Plus, I want to see if Brad gets killed by Walter, since that would be awesome.

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