Ooooooooh, sly got besmooched by a cougar(literally)! I wish neyla wasn't evil, sly and her make a great couple.

Pretty good. I just don't understand why Neyla shot Sly. Couldn't they have separated? And Stinger- are you certain you don't sound like your ego is planet-sized?

Haha, "No giving him chocolate!" (Neyla gives him chocolate) PPPPLLLLLLEEEEAASSSEEE UUUPPPPDDDATTTE!

good old Carmelita!

PLEASE UPDATE YOUR STORY ROCKS!

please update!

UPDATE!

update!

Interesting. I always thought Sly and Neyla would be good together. I'll deftinately keep reading!

wait? im not getting this, so she shot him in the chest but their still together? i sopose the shot chest thing was part of thier weird plan! lol, carmile should so NOT be with sly neyla should, no one else! lol :) liking the plot! weird but good!

alleywayqueen

(i just can't be botherd to log on!)

I love it!

plz make more chaps :)

I'm in agreement with all you other reviewers of this being a refreshing rest from the cliched pairings I normally see, btu I am afraid the writing style sufferes from amateurness. Fortunately, I'm gonna give you a few hints on improving it.

1) Double-check your spelling and grammar. It's no-where near as bad than most of the stuff I've seen, but It could definetely benefit from lots of work.

2) Improve your description. The whole thing seems too dialogue-based, and I want a little more description of WHAT is going on, WHAT things look like and HOW things are said.

Another thing - never use caps lock for shouting - it just looks amateur. Explain HOW they shouted, and that'll really put some feeling into it.

3) You're going a a million miles an hour with this story - slow down a lot! It isn't a game or a film, it's a story and time should be taken, so there's a lot of care. I want to see this become the pinnacle of anti-SLyCarm, but I don't see that happenng if it goes past akin to a Bugatti Veyron. Take your time OK?

This could be great, but you d need to make your writing better.

Keep it comin'

AG510

Not bad, not bad at all. But don't think of making a sequel to this though, the Bentley/Penelope is a prime factor in the making of sly 4. Very nice work, but HM thinks you might be overdosing on the stereotypical brit. "luv"? C'mon you can do better then that!

great stuff and hoping for more!

Ou, things are getting hot!