|Reviews for Price of Crime|
| Mitchell 3/27/13 . chapter 6
Ooooooooh, sly got besmooched by a cougar(literally)! I wish neyla wasn't evil, sly and her make a great couple.
| R 8/11/10 . chapter 6
Pretty good. I just don't understand why Neyla shot Sly. Couldn't they have separated? And Stinger- are you certain you don't sound like your ego is planet-sized?
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 6
Haha, "No giving him chocolate!" (Neyla gives him chocolate) PPPPLLLLLLEEEEAASSSEEE UUUPPPPDDDATTTE!
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 5
good old Carmelita!
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 4
PLEASE UPDATE YOUR STORY ROCKS!
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 3
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 2
| slylady345 6/5/10 . chapter 1
| Deyinel 3/29/09 . chapter 6
Interesting. I always thought Sly and Neyla would be good together. I'll deftinately keep reading!
| alleywayqueen 8/5/08 . chapter 6
wait? im not getting this, so she shot him in the chest but their still together? i sopose the shot chest thing was part of thier weird plan! lol, carmile should so NOT be with sly neyla should, no one else! lol :) liking the plot! weird but good!
(i just can't be botherd to log on!)
| Ravengrayson989 7/17/08 . chapter 1
I love it!
plz make more chaps :)
| Stinger - VXR42 6/5/06 . chapter 6
I'm in agreement with all you other reviewers of this being a refreshing rest from the cliched pairings I normally see, btu I am afraid the writing style sufferes from amateurness. Fortunately, I'm gonna give you a few hints on improving it.
1) Double-check your spelling and grammar. It's no-where near as bad than most of the stuff I've seen, but It could definetely benefit from lots of work.
2) Improve your description. The whole thing seems too dialogue-based, and I want a little more description of WHAT is going on, WHAT things look like and HOW things are said.
Another thing - never use caps lock for shouting - it just looks amateur. Explain HOW they shouted, and that'll really put some feeling into it.
3) You're going a a million miles an hour with this story - slow down a lot! It isn't a game or a film, it's a story and time should be taken, so there's a lot of care. I want to see this become the pinnacle of anti-SLyCarm, but I don't see that happenng if it goes past akin to a Bugatti Veyron. Take your time OK?
This could be great, but you d need to make your writing better.
Keep it comin'
| heistmaster 5/26/06 . chapter 6
Not bad, not bad at all. But don't think of making a sequel to this though, the Bentley/Penelope is a prime factor in the making of sly 4. Very nice work, but HM thinks you might be overdosing on the stereotypical brit. "luv"? C'mon you can do better then that!
| bakuto 12/7/05 . chapter 5
great stuff and hoping for more!
| Shark 12/6/05 . chapter 5
Ou, things are getting hot!