There were a few parts in the middle that could have been expanded to make it flow better, but I like it. The ending gave me a little smile, and I'm happy John isn't giving up yet. Well done.

Nice job! :)

I liked it. Couple things, just as a note. There were quite a few instances where words were together with no space between them. THe other thing, I don't quite think John would go so easily with Lou. His one exwife's name is Billie Lou, so he might have some problem with that. Maybe, I don't know. But otherwise I enjoyed it. Love the beginning, up until we meet Lou, but after that's good too. I've just got a preference for the first part. Oh well.

I love it! Munch is the best!

One of the few songfics that I've read that I've liked! Also liked the bartender's POV. Nicely done!