it was definently a M rated story, u forgot 1 of the def.s

Not to bad "Goddess" hehe :P Anyway, you might want to true another rout when the characters are talking amonst themselves, it felt alittle to script-ish (is that a word? I dunno...well it is now! :D) Other than that I see a nice piece of work here. Keep it up!

OH, and to might want to fix the formating alittle bit. I saw a few places in the story that inuyasha was alittle out of character, and when he was talking the two thoughts ran together at one point

"blahblahblahblah""blahblahblah" (couldn't recall what he actually said, sorry. dont take that the wrong way okay? Good story! Write more! OH and tell me what you think of my KP story sometime eh?