Well developed, even though it's rather short. This is one of my favorite movies, I was looking forward to a longer investigation of Sands.

I might have put a line in after the stiff left arm... something like "He tried to remember if it was the real arm or the fake."

Very enjoyable.

--Pesh

ps: found your site through my girl, dominique's, LJ.

oh! this is a good story!
i can't wait for the next chapter!

just so you know, i'm considering clicking around on these pages/chapters to mess with the whole "story hit" thing. but maybe i'll be nice.

Oh please Sands, did you really have to kill them, I thought... a faint wiff of my feeling from the movie, where I almost sat jumping in the sofa "no no don't kill him! Don't actually DO it. Oh... *wince* He shot the cook." LOL So you had him great in character there! ;D I like this a lot and I'm curious to see what's gonna happened (and what he wants with the boy!). Write, write, wrtie more!

And about reviews... I've a PotC-story with over 300 hits, and only 3 reviews... Top that if you can. ;D Tho, it's understandable, cause it's a really smutty one, and people don't wanna admit they read that kinda stuff! But it's sad for me, since I've grown addicted to response... Or maybe it's my punishment cause I treat Jack so badly in all my stories. That poor sod, he just wanna enjoy himself. Anyway, I'm rambling. Sorry. Keep it up. Give us another capter! :D

Off to a good start! I must admit that I usually cringe when I read stories where Sands has gone back to the U.S., but you wrote it very well. He most definitely would play head games with everyone there. I loved the comment about the mummy in a backless hospital gown...hee! I'm very interested to see where you go with this.

interesting turn of events in Ch. 2! Very good start, looking forward to reading more - I really like the way you captured Sands' voice/language.

Cheers,
Helen

i liked that very much! update soon. loving his little sayings throughout they always earn a smile!!