I LOVE IT ( Even though I'm not a big slash reader I still loved the detail and emotion that pretty much gushed out! Well written indead!

prongette

This was great. Astounding imagery...what, by chance, was the English assignment?

It was good. although my school is very strict with proper English, so I try not to correct or even suggest things , because it makes me feel like a prat. seriously. i will give you a little smidgen of a tip, though. You may want to use fewer simple sentences. Once in a while, they are great for emphasis, but over using them destroys their significance. It's like when you have a favorite food, but you eat it every night for a month, you start to hate it.

Nox

PS tell me how you do on the assignment

Rem? Is Rem waiting? Please? I'm hopeless. lol. Keep writing, hun! ::huggles::