  Jaynariffic 2006-08-06 . chapter 5PLEASE UPDATE SOON! I LOVE THIS STORY!! *Gives Puppy Dog Eyes* |
| Kankuro'sPuppetGirl 2006-07-25 . chapter 1 Hey, I spotted an error here that reveals Ari as a girl.
'Ari rubbed at HER head yawning...' |
| Kankuro'sPuppetGirl 2006-07-03 . chapter 4 What the? (Hits computer) Stupid computer! You made my review for chapter 5 look all weird by taking out spaces and words! |
| Kankuro'sPuppetGirl 2006-06-28 . chapter 5 Well, no DUH Ari's a girl. But still, I finally get to see Clay paired up with ugh must be that cold. coughcoughandkimikocoughcough that doesn't sound good. coughcoughandomicoughcough I need my medicine. |
| DoctrineVidal 2005-12-15 . chapter 1 this is great! PLEASE WRITE MORE! |
| Catwarrior 2005-12-14 . chapter 5 CUTE! I still think Clay has a thing for Ari. I have a bad feeling that Ari isn't saying something important. Like she and Chase are like probably related, brother and sister, twins. MAYBE! |
| Kosmic 2005-12-14 . chapter 5 DNAngel is a great show. If you want I can give you the lyrics in english for you. I love your work please keep it up. |
| K Entertainment 2005-10-20 . chapter 4 the element steel is just fine by me sounds cool |
| Catwarrior 2005-10-06 . chapter 4 okay, Chase will win but Ari is a girl. She has a crush on Clay and Clay is going for it, wierdly. Kimiko know that Ari is a girl. Ari and Chase have fought before. I thinks that is it. Am I right? |
| Blue Brittney 2005-10-06 . chapter 4 That was a really good chapter! Some parts were really funny. |
| Kosmic 2005-10-05 . chapter 4 Very nice chapter and Ari made some small miss takes almost realing she is a girl. Keep up the work. |
| anonymous Jewel 2005-10-04 . chapter 3 I absolutely loved this chapter! It was hilarious! Keep it up~ |
| indigirl450 2005-10-02 . chapter 3 Very good story. I love it so far. But I'm a bit confused. Is Ari a girl pretending to be a guy? |
| Blue Brittney 2005-10-02 . chapter 3 Really great chapter! It was so funny! |
| Kurosuzaku 2005-10-01 . chapter 2 ... I read less then half way through this chapter btw XP
That whole bit with Ari (Arisu) is just like Kakashi (pull out a book 'n read while fighting) Couldn't you come up with something a little more original? O well.
Also in the first chapter, you may want to proofread it. You made some mistakes where you put he and she for Ari so I got really confused. Or maybe it was cuz I read too fast :/ hmm...
In any case, I can't seem to emphasize this enough, proofread your work (I know it's slow but it makes your work seem better!) So then you wouldn't have to apologize for the spelling and grammatic errors. =P
And I'm off to read "Through the Fireplace" ^_^ |
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