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Reviews For: On the Bridge

Lucien's Angel87 2005-10-30 ch 1, anon.	abuse(sorry I didn't feel like signing in) Anyways I think this was nice. Yes, I was like come on pair up Marietta and Steeg but of course they didn't so this was nice to read. BTW I noticed your name and yeah I am a big Albel/Nel fan. I absolutely Love Albel, so anyways yeah keep up the good work.
crimson-fantasy 2005-10-06 ch 1,	abusethis fic is lovely i love that couple they don't have anywhere near an of of them sadly you should write more on this couple you really capture marriettas emmotions and i love to see such promising fics please write another one thats longer though please...
Blue Persuasion 2005-09-27 ch 1,	abuseOh, I agree on this pairing. After the said scene from your summary, and the ending for the game I got (where Fayt ends up alone) I can see these two working out. Actually, the ending for the game I got kinda left me feeling a little sorry for Marietta, so thanks for giving her something! She didn't have a huge part in the game but I think she should have gotten more...so you made up for that.
BlueTrillium 2005-09-27 ch 1,	abuseNot a bad fic! I do support the Marietta/Steeg pairing (mostly because of that scene with them talking on the bench, I admit) though of course I'm more of an Albel/Nel and Cliff/Mirage fan... ;) I always thought Marietta was a little more independent, myself, but like you said, it's a hard pair to write because there's not much info on either of them. I think you did a very good job with the spelling and punctuation. I did not find any errors, at least. There is one spot where I might change a period into a comma: "You see. I do love you Marietta." - I would change it to "You see, I do love you Marietta." but that's just a preference, not an error. :) I did check out your profile, and I'd be glad to beta if you want... On a kind of weird side note - I really liked the pattern you used for the breaks between sections, the one that looks like "". In the font that it appears in on my pc, it looks like a chain, kind of like the one hanging from Albel's collar...Anyway, would it be okay if I used that if I need a scene break in my fic? Well, I figure people don't really "own" the scene break patterns, but it would seem wrong to me to use it without asking...I told you it was a weird question... ;)
Deathblade Prime 2005-09-27 ch 1,	abuseThis really quite sweet and heart warming. I do hope that this isn't a one-shot fic. I believe that I went through out the entier site and I haven't found a single fic that has either Tynave or Farleen as a love intrest. Also I'm planning to do a Star Ocean 3 and Armored Core 2 crossover. I'd be honored to be your Beta. My e-mail ->

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