this is and interesting story and i really like the way that you are telling it. it really pulls at your emotions

what is the second part called and have you started yet?

This was marvelously done and I've saved it to ebook for future rereading on my ebook reader/PDA. I'm already looking forward to the upcoming stories in the set and was disappointed that you'd not had a chance to write and post the third story in the set yet. I hope your muse and schedule will allow you to write and post more chapters on more stories sometime soon. Keep up the good work. Zafaran {mailto:} zafaran {at} fastmail {dot} fm

Can't think of much to say other than...WOW! Awesome story! I really liked how the plot of "who's--been--hurting--Obi-Wan?" was woven thru the whole story. The way it revealed was such that it seemed as though you had the whole idea thought out before even beginning the first chapter! If there were any grammatical or spelling errors they were so few that I've forgotten them already. The story flowed well overall, and I really liked your characterization of Qui-Gon. I can definitely see him getting upset at anybody abusing any youngling, not just Obi-Wan. Can wait to read the sequel!

This is one of those fantastic stories that you hope to find each time you page through . I loved this so much it almost hurts. Wonderfully written, beautifully carried out.

Poor Obi-Wan. People just love to pick on him.

Great story! Off to read the sequel now; it looks good from the preview. : )

OMG! I LOVED IT! I love the Qui/Obi relationship and this was near perfect!! Please write more like it!!

LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT! Couldn't stop reading, even though I have to get up tomorrow morning, and am so eager to read the sequel tomorrow. Obi-wan's fear and anger were so palpable and I like how his attackers were actually doing something for good (well, so they thought). And it made me think, "What would have happened if Obi-Wan hadn't taught Anakin? How would the story have played out differently?" - kind of like the Infinities series of SW comics. My favorite scene was when Obi-Wan physically attacked Qui-Gon, especially after he'd turned his back, because it showed how damaged Obi-Wan was - almost like he had multiple personalities - a fearful one and an angry one. I so look forward to reading more!

This is a wonderful story! It has got plot, tears, joy and action, and it doesn't let go once you've started to read it :) I sincerely hope life for Obi-Wan will be a lot easier with master Qui-Gon to take care of him.

WOW, this story takes my breath away every single time I read it- and believe my I read it very often. I just really really love it, and I am glad it has a happy ending!
Teleia

Loved it!Poor Obi-Wan, glad they worked out what was going on and saved him!

Ok, so I guess I didn't review for this story. Anyway, this was the second JA fic I read on this site (before I became a member), and it's awesome. I think I cried (or I would have if I hadn't been in school). So, way cool fic, can't wait to read more from you.

i think you have found your talent.

Thanks for an entertaining read!