Perhaps its a little late to be reviewing but I will anyway. Being a huge fan of Hex Coda (or anything Stephen Gagne writes or does) I must say I love your story. All of the characters seem in character, even Daniel seems to be and Daniel is the hardest character to write about. Delly and Justin were such wonderful OC's and I can tell you put a lot of personality into both of them. I know your muse has probably left you (escpecially now that HX2 was cancelled) but, if it ever comes back, even for a little bit, please write more. I'll definantly read it.

Okay, since you know I'm a hex coda fan, you know I'm going to have an opinion on this...
1. We have GOT to incorporate Justin into the HX PW. The orc-blood issue is a button begging to be pushed.

2. I LOVE your depiction of Daniel. You really captured the high RP feel of him in HX2, and it's great that you can write a short in his head; it's also pretty impressive, since that's the foggiest place in the game!

3. It's interesting that you can develop so many characters with the same basic values, but such diverse personalities. I would be so bored right now if you took the same grey base PC, and flipped it into every single story. Good Job.

Other than minor typos, and a few misused words here and there, you've done really well. I know this was just for fun, but that's what all writing is really. If you want any help with basic editing, you have my email.

I really enjoyed this. It's a fun world to explore, and I think your ideas and portrayals are easily tranplanted into it.

Hm. This is one I read earlier, and now I can't for the life of me remember if it was posted before or after the first release of HX2 alpha. This is rough - much rougher than the other three...but this one shapes Miranda VERY well in essence. I know that Stefan gave us Miranda (and Daniel and Pandy and Lester), but your Miranda is more fully developed in this story...taking on a different life but without moving out of character. Surprisingly, the monk needs a little more work. I suspect that she is so familiar to you internally that there are aspects that YOU know, that give more depth to her character, that we as readers don't. You can't fill in all of the backstory, but you can develop her more fully as both a foil for Miranda and as a character in her own right. You also know what the Recognizer said about the PC...how does that fit into the character of this monk? A little more context would be good, too. You bring in some through dialog, but you can bring in a bit more through the description of the setting. Otherwise, it is a little hard to understand why Miranda is at sixes and sevens.

Which brings us to the focus of the story...balance. Your philosophy here is intriguing...the shifting balance point. If practice helps you to follow the shift, you will eventually perceive that you are standing at the still point in the center of chaos...you won't seem to actually move because you will become adept at standing in that center. Not peaceful (ask Katrina survivors) but potent with possibility (like the Balance Point Herald) Is that what you are aiming at? I THINK so, but I'm not sure. A more fully developed monk exemplifying the balance that you are trying to describe will help clarify your intent.

I really like these! I've also played the module (can't wait for the next one) and really enojyed it, but I hadn't really thought of writing fanfiction for it. I'm glad someone as good as you did! I especially like this last one, "Secrets." But, I am a bit biased, since I do love Daniel so. Hehe.

I'd be overjoyed if you continued these... *wink wink, nudge nudge*

Really enjoyed that! thanks.

Scary, scary halfings! They SEEM cute, but see what really go on in their minds!

*sigh* poor Daniel, I felt sorry for him, thought a pan with his face printed on it would be a very cute pan indeed ^^

Anyway, silliness apart, it's good to see my favourite writer writing a story on my favourite module, it's like having a double ration of chocolate!

Having not played the game, I'll just leave you one review: but because I really want to. This is very well written. The character interactions were great and the timing between actions was very crisp. These characters really stand out, especially in the second chapter. The description of the noise boring into his head was my personal favorite. Overall this was a very strong piece.

Hm...being a fan of the Penultima series,(which, if you haven't played them yet, could also get you thinking...besides being hilarious) I decided to give this one a try. Sadly, it was just as you said:since I've never played the mod, I'm a little in the dark. So, that's first on my list of things to do.

Regardless, I'm still liking this so far, and I know I'll like it even more once I understand all the references. And of course, this story has a monk, which is enough to keep me reading if nothing else will.

I'll be back. I got a mod to download. Keep it up!

OH! I love this module...although I have yet to finish it...Keep it up!

Oh...its obvious that you have finished it...could you give me a tip on how to get past that annoying part in the Cathedral Corp about the application stuff? Its driving me nuts...and Daniel's advice isn't exactly helping...