Woah. I'm speechless. Makes me want to go back and play the games again from the very beginning. It's so awesome it hurts. Update soon

Not bad for an original character fic. A few parts were cliched (the parents of Suma/Aaron being dead) but if it's The World's fault, then there's less of a cliche! I don't suppose you've seen the trailers for .hack//G.U. then? Please continue!

Great fic going to read more later hope you read and review my fic HackRuin

Chapter 4's character is Asgard

Character Name: Asgard
Title: The Fortress
Class: Heavy Axeman
Bio: A gigantic and powerful player who frequently stands guard at dungeon entrances to prevent low-level players from getting hurt.

It's a nice fanfic so far. I doubt I could deal with everyone thinking I was Kite or trying to be like him. Poor guy. At least one person, aside from Kite, Blackrose, and Balmung, hadn't called him that on sight. On a side note, I hate PKers. When Fragment comes out I may try to level and become a PK Hunter. You know, a guy that hunts down PKers.

This is really the best dot hack fic I've read in a long time. I love it when authors set stories after the events in the game, because there is limitless room there. The idea of having the bracelet react to Suma was awesome too. I can't wait for further updates!

Character Name: Love
Title: The Apprentice of Affection
Class: Archmaster
Bio: An energitic player who loves to be the center of attention. Somewhere along the way, she became fierce rivals with Piros.

Oh Nice chap. I love the way you set up your battles they're really nice. Good work.

Here's Chapter 2's character bio.

Character Name: River
Title: The Fountain of Youth
Class: Wavemaster
Bio: River is passive and soft-spoken. He is frequently abandoned by players when in dungeons for one reason or another. Despite his passiveness, he is very loyal to his friends and will try anything to help them.

Nice plot twist. Keep up the good work.

Hey Nice chapter, you should keep going. I love the way its coming along. I like the way you designed Suma as a character, the cold rude main heros are always the best. Anyway keep writing!

I'm sorry, I neglected to tell everyone about the Charcater Bios. Every chapter, submitted as a review by myself. I post a character profile about the character who appeared in the chapter.

This Chapters character(s) are:

Character Name: Suma
Title: The Scythe
Class: Twin Blade
Bio: He's very cold to most people. Being rude seems to be his only greeting to anyone who mistakes him for Kite. Underneath his mean exterior, is a lonely kid. He has no Member Address at the beginning of the story. At least until Eterni...

Character Name: Eterni
Title: The Wingless
Class: Heavy Axeman
Bio: A kind and generous player who can read people very easily, even online. She usually spends her time at the sanctum in Hidden Forbidden Holy Ground. She's nice to everyone and can't help but feel sympathy for Suma.

ZOMG! Yay! I was looking forward to this fic! ^-^ it's VERY well written! pfft, and you say I'm better than you. =P great work! I would love to see more of this ^-^

So far so good.

Nice story, please update soon.