This is a great story i think you should finish it if you can . Plz plz try 2 finish it. Thanks alot :) Ashleigh

Wow
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Its amazing acutally&&
the ending was actually great:D

Hey great story. It was very cute. It is very different then the stories I'm used to reading. I liked it alot.

Perhaps, you can do a sequel.

Diana

I could give some negative comments on this particular writing style, but I can tell they would be lost on you. I can see that this is the first story you have ever written and that you have improved dramatically. However, this is a good idea, perhaps you should rewrite it?

great story...but i really think serenity and darien should become more involved.

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