I find this a rather refreshing story. Getting into Gary's thoughts and exploring the way he thinks about Misty was good. I like how well you've written this. The ending gives the reader a hint that Gary and Misty will be a potential couple.

THIS SUCKED

aww!! so cute!

aww it was cute, ecspecialy the ending, hope you write more

It was so great. The dialogue was heartbreaking, almost dream like. I very much liked it! You should completely keep on writing!

The ending was completely real too, very down to earth, It's a nice change. It's a pity it's just a one shot, I love the way you write, it's so poetic. You dress up every ounce of words and make it pretty. Whenever I try to do that it never quite comes out as yours. ^^

Kudos!

This is adorable! I love it!

OMG! AWESOME FIC! *squeals* The moment I saw that it was egoshipping I got all giddy and excited! This seriously just made my day. ^_^

The lead was so simple, yet, so utterly brilliant. You succeeded in immediately vacuuming every ounce of my attention.

This line was lovely: -only half filled but long forgotten because of his gaze long ago preoccupied at staring at the red gym mistress –
What delicate wording. I love it! The words you choose in this fic are so subtle, and still they radiate such powerful emotions. Truly, this is lovely.

Great line: -flowing of hair like simple quivered water on a shallow lake-
I liked that! It was so SWEET how he was basically caught off guard by how pretty Misty was, aw! *gushes*

And this part: -He thinks that it might just be the sun that was searing her image from the background which made her look beautiful, or maybe it was the waltzing music which made her voice sound like melodies, or even just maybe the crimson etched color upon the sky plains which deepened the crimson hue of her hair – that made him think so, but he’s not sure, and he leaves that thought alone.-
0_0 WOW, SUCH GOURGOUS DESCRIPTIONS!

My heart wrenched with misery for Misty when she uttered “Because I think I love him.” *sniffles* That as just SO sad. ;_;
Gosh! POOR MISTY! She’s such a great girl, she deserves better. . .no, she deserved THE BEST! Meaning: she deserves Gary Oak. ~_^

Heh, leave it to Gary to cut to the chase: -“You love him, but he loves someone else. So what are you going to do?”- *giggles* I wub him so much! Hehehe! ^.^

*giggles more* This line made me smirk: -and the person who is too dense and too stupid to not notice- Um, ^_^; yeah, that’s Ash!

AW! SO TRAGIC AND SO SWEET! I really enjoyed it. You’re writing style is so fluid. Really, I just couldn’t take my eyes off the story.

Are you planning anymore egoshippies in the future?? I hope so, you’ve certainly got a talent for them! ^.^ And thanks for writing this and for R&Ring my fic! We egoshippers need to stick together! ~_^ But, I’m thrilled because GAML is finally making a comeback around here!

Write more fics! ^.^

Maia

Great ONESHOT! it was really well describe! neways continue wirting egoshippy there's never enough of them! c ya!